User blog comment:Fadingsilverstar16/For those who do not know yet (and I'm sure that would be... most of you?)/@comment-1874924-20101112065018

For what it's worth, I think your handling of the romance element is natural enough. In Noah's case, it seems like Stockholm Syndrome may be at work, enhanced by the fact that Heather actually does come to care about what happens to him. In Heather's case, something similar could be at work, since she is also feeling trapped (albeit not by Noah) and it seems entirely plausible that her initial feelings of protectiveness could become something warmer.

As for all of this happening too fast, 'tain't necessarily so, as you'll see from the Wikipedia article. Besides, it's very common, even among professional writers, to compress events for the sake of drama, especially in stories intended for visual media (TV, movies, or theatre).

P.S.: Your blog posts might get more traffic if you used more descriptive titles. Ideally, people seeing your post on the Activity Feed should be able to tell, just from the title, what the post is about.