User blog comment:Sprinklemist/New Story/@comment-1636990-20120110114645/@comment-1636990-20120110231540

I attempted to, but everytime I did you got offended, so I gave up. Basically, describe what's going on, the tone of voice, adding more emotion in the character's voices. Showing instead of telling. Stuff like that. All the characters have noticeable faults and good qualities (except Quimberly) so that's good.