User blog comment:Owenandheatherfan/Total Drama Writer/@comment-1871576-20120716014857/@comment-1871576-20120716015408


 * Beth: Wow! The snow looks fake but it's real.


 * Chris: I made it. Next?

Ok, first, that's hell for grammar. Second, I don't see a plot other than Beth being excited or interested by snow. Also, it's in script form. Most stories I read in real life aren't in script. Also, puncuation is a problem. I don't see any periods or question makrs or anything. It makes it look like a "run on" sentence, where it has no end.

Rate: 1/10.