User blog:That Epic/Reality Realized Week 1

Characters/Characterization/Dialouge
I felt this was one of the big areas where this chapter lost me. I felt like a lot of the characters were interchangeable, and I had to scroll up to look at the stereotypes constantly to remember who's who. Some of them, like Hayden, Travis, and Claire, were established well, but overall it felt weak. The dialouge was also very weak and non-compelling, and a lot of it just felt like meaningless chatter that didn't advance anyone. 5/20

Plots/Flow/Development/Arcs
I definitely saw some room for development, and think that a lot of the characters showed that they could be developed into really great characters. There were also some nice arcs set up, like Claire vs Layla and Bennett vs Michelle. One of my main problems with this chapter though, was the challenge. It felt like it was going in circles, and though it left room for interactions, I got very confused on who was where. On a similar note, the flashbacks in the middle of the challenge felt like they were breaking up the action, and all of them felt awkward. I would reccomend keeping everything in the present. 10/20.

Theme of the Week
Introductions was the theme, and I didn't feel like it went well here. The actual introductions felt really rushed, and we barely got to know any of the characters. This was slightly remedied during the challenge, but I would have reccomended really focusing on the introductions and helping us ease into and know these characters, 8/20

Personal Enjoyment
Space said in his review that the first two parts of the chapter were sort of a drag to get through, and I totally agree. The first part's interactions were very repetitive, and it was hard to read. The second part felt meandering, and I felt like we were going nowhere with the challenge/characters. The third part definitely improved, and I felt we were finally getting somewhere and more interesting interactions were introduced. Continue writing like the third part, and the story will go much better. 8/20

Spelling and Grammar
No real complaints here. There were some tense changes, but that's super minor and doesn't affect at all. 8/10

Editing
This was also really good. Even though some's personalities were sort of unclear, everyone got roughly the same amount of screentime. No complaints here. 10/10

Overall, this chapter was rough in some areas, but the story does have potential. Try and take constructive criticism from all four reviews and build this into the great story it could be!

Overall: 49/100