User blog:Bridgette dj10/AJ's Judging for Week 1

Total Drama Fortune

 * Characters: I do love the characters in this story so far. I hadn't read it before so I had to get myself aquainted with the characters, but I do enjoy them. I liked how they were playing Truth or Dare, that semi-involved the game but at the same time was kept at a friendly level. That was funny how Eric was all chill with cheating on his girlfriend with a guy but not a girl xD But I really enjoyed the characters and their interactions
 * Plot: The challenge was more of a downfall for me. I liked how it was more a survivor-esque challenge, but it was kind of hard to follow. Some of it was worded weirdly, making it hard to follow, and also the challenge was extremely short. Also, I liked the idea of the challenge, but you didn't explore into it enough. It was really just "XXX got the key, XXX untied the bag," on repeat, but I still liked it. My Explosion chapters are short, but the challenge in this one was barely focused on, and it wasn't an exciting win for the Ducks or the Sharks. Other than that I thought the plot was fairly interesting, as I hadn't read the story and I still was on the edge of my seat. I liked how the drama was focused on this episode, but I still think the challenge could have been elaborated on more, other than that good job!
 * Grammar/Spelling: Grammar was fairly good, I saw some typos, which doesn't really count as grammar, but sometimes the typos were so weird that I would have to reread the sentence multiple times before understanding what it said. Other than that, grammar is fairly good, just watch tenses, because sometimes it's easy to accidentally switch between the past and the present, but grammar was overall good. There weren't any spelling errors aside from the few typos.
 * Final Score: My final score for this story is a 15 out of 20, awesome job Sunny it was a good read

Total Drama Showdown

 * Characters: I love the characters in TDShowdown. Like in Total Drama Fortune, the characters were definitely a booster for me. I love Hilda's clueless-ness to the real world, as well as the interactions between various characters. I love how you write Scott, and I also am really liking Bradley as a character as well. I enjoy how two wu are found, meaning that anything could happen. Tina and Angelina's fights not only provide drama, but good comic relief. Good job!
 * Plot: I also really enjoyed the plot, as I said above I loved how two wu were found. The character interactions also really add to the plot line, and I loved both challenges. The showdowns are so much fun to read, but so are the challenges. I loved the plot, good work.
 * Grammar/Spelling: Grammar was fairly strong, it was sometimes confusing for me, and there were some misplaced commas, but other than that your tense remained consistent as did various other grammatic rules.
 * Final Score: My final score for this story is a 18 out of 20, it was an awesome read BB!

Dystopia

 * Characters: There weren't very many characters introduced, but I think the characters are really comical (which I hope is the point xD). I enjoy how users are featured in the story, and I think that the characters went in a good direction. It was funny to picture people playing the roles, and you put that image in my head well with these characters. Good work!
 * Plot: The plot was interesting, like Sunny's story it wasn't very long. I also don't see how it was Total Drama related though, I mean it was wiki related but the plot was kind of strange to me. It seemed very off topic from the general theme of the wiki, but it wasn't an uninteresting plot so that was still good. The biggest thing was that it seemed kind of unrelated, and strange.
 * Grammar/Spelling: Grammar was really strong in this story, as was sentence structure, tense consistency, and spelling. Nice job!
 * Final Score: My final score for this story is 14 out of 20, good job!

Totally Dramatic Final Battle

 * Characters: I think the characters were played fairly well in this story. I am not sure how I feel about Justin becoming Justina, and there were some moments where the characters seemed out of character. For Explosion, this may help you, is I pictuure te character saying the quote, and think to myself, "would this be said in an episode of Total Drama by this character?" Generally reading it while mentally listening to it in the character's voice help. Other than that it was done pretty well!
 * Plot: Ok the biggest thing for me was that the plot was incomplete. Unless you ended the story at a very strange note, with no one winning, losing, the challenge not being completed and no elimination, it was definitely incomplete. Other than that, it was a fairly interesting challenge, interesting to read, and the character interactions were good as stated above. I think you should try to even out focus though, and make some of the interactions a bit more realistic (I am not sure about how I feel with Lightning and Leshawna, I don't know how Leshawna would fall for the cockiness, being someone who is straight up and such). Other than that good job!
 * Grammar/Spelling: Grammar was good in this story! I would say about the same level as Total Drama Fortune, just watch for tense issues, but punctuation and spelling were both close to flawless so good job!
 * Final Score: I was told that since the story was incomplete, I am not allowed to give it above a ten, so my final score for this story is a 9 out of 20