Talk:Total Drama What The Heck?

Polls
Which Team is your favorite? Team Indestructible The Bulldogs The Killer Kleptomaniacal Top Banana Bottom Feeding Perci OVER 9000 Muskies of Goth Magical Whatnot Globetrotting Locusts Studded Jumping Lemmings MEH BUKKIT League Of Super Justice (aka the Fun Bunch)

Who should have been eliminated? Taylor; She cries a lot, cost Team Indestructible the first part of the challenge and is very weak. Justin; He was lazy and acted dumb especially in the Jeopardy challenge which hurt his team. Jovi; She was bossy, yelled at Taylor and cracked under pressure. Someone from The Bulldogs Someone from The Killer Kleptomaniacal Top Banana Bottom Feeding Perci OVER 9000 Muskies of Goth Magical Whatnot Globetrotting Locusts Studded Jumping Lemmings MEH BUKKIT League Of Super Justice (aka the Fun Bunch)

How much did you like Chapter 4, on a scale of 1 to 5? 5 stars, I loved it! 4 stars, it was good. 3 stars, it was passable. 2 stars, I didn't like it that much. 1 star, I hated it!

Favorite Old Contestant
Like the little preview says this show will have old contestants (the 26 or so contestants seen in TDI, TDA or TDWT). Please comment here who you would like to see. Only vote for one contestant. Like stated above you may vote for any contestant the original 22 campers, Sierra, Alejandro, Blainley or even Mr. Coconut. If you have anyone else please ask here and I'll decide. Thank You. Hiding Oreos in her bra. 03:00, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

GWEN! I hope it&#39;s candy! Or a whole bunch of shoes! Or shoes made of candy! 03:25, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

Noah. -w- &quot;I once saw him juggle a baby, a bowling ball, and an olive. It was made extra hard because the baby pooped.&quot; 12:36, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

Courtney! In my own little word, they all know me there... 00:31, April 27, 2011 (UTC)

Voting ends Monday!!! Last Of The Gophers!!! 22:56, May 20, 2011 (UTC)

I changed my mind. Voting is over. All 3 made it! I'll post all the old contestants on the page soon... Last Of The Gophers!!! 03:57, May 21, 2011 (UTC)

Original Contestant
I would like to use two original characters (designed by users) for the story. I will choose one boy and one girl. You may submit up to 2 characters (a boy and a girl) but I will only choose one of them. Use this format to enter your character. If you have any questions please leave them on my talkpage. I will try to write the characters best according to the guidelines you set out. Here is the format:

Name: Name

User: Username or signature

Stereotype: Goth, Cheerleader, Jock, Punk, etc.

Look: Clothes, Hair Color, and or Style, Eye Color, Skin Tone and anything else you think you need to put in.

Basic Description: Like something that maybe used for a bio (it does not have to be that long if you don't want it to be. Make it as long as you wish) or to help understand the character better so I know how to write for him or her.

Thank you, Rhonda

Name: SG

User: Shadowgeoff

Stereotype: The Shy Technopath

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<p style="margin: 0.0px 0.0px 13.0px 0.0px; line-height: 23.0px; font: 13.0px Helvetica; color: #3a3a3a">Description: SG was always quite the shy person. He has only interacted with a few people from school, and is somewhat isolated at home. He feels much more comfortable talking to people online, as it "breaks the borders of speech, appearence, and you don;t have to tell anyone your own issues."

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Chat
We all probably know what this is. Anyway I'd like to yay I finally did something. Any questions or comments (unless related to above categories) may be posted here. Thank You. Hiding Oreos in her bra. 03:05, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

<p style="margin: 0.0px 0.0px 13.0px 0.0px; line-height: 23.0px; font: 13.0px Helvetica; color: #3a3a3a">OMG. I'm not the only one who has trouble with headings! :D XD Sorry, Rhonda. I hope it&#39;s candy! Or a whole bunch of shoes! Or shoes made of candy! 02:55, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

<p style="margin: 0.0px 0.0px 13.0px 0.0px; line-height: 23.0px; font: 13.0px Helvetica; color: #3a3a3a">Yay, looking forward to this. I hope it's good. :3 &quot;I once saw him juggle a baby, a bowling ball, and an olive. It was made extra hard because the baby pooped.&quot; 12:36, April 23, 2011 (UTC)]

<p style="margin: 0.0px 0.0px 13.0px 0.0px; line-height: 23.0px; font: 13.0px Helvetica; color: #3a3a3a">Thanks SG and Toad. I hope its good too. Hiding Oreos in her bra. 19:54, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

My favorite newbies are Barbie and Cosmic River. Barbie cuz I generally like Goth characters and Cosmic River cuz it's a cool nam. XD Also, I counted, and it seems the old contestants have 13 people while the newbies have 12. Is there a reason for this or is it just a goof? -- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  12:02, May 21, 2011 (UTC)

XD I didn't notice. It might have to do with fan contest. See Gwen, Courtney and Noah were all going to be in it. But I forgot about Noah. So I thought he was the 13 one. I wanted an uneven amount for... a reason but then I realized Noah was in it so I decided not to. But after checking over a blog post I realized someone had voted for Sierra so I decided to add her. I probably should have added a male newbie but I was really tired so I forgot. I'm not going to do it now as I think uneven will do fine and I don't have any ideas XD. Last Of The Gophers!!! 18:57, May 21, 2011 (UTC)

Wow! That was awesome! I liked the chapter, now a little critique on the newbies. Julie annoyed me at first, but I was glad when the rabdomness was toned down a bit. Collin, I could truly hear his annoying voice. XD But my favorite newbies of all, now that I've read, has GOT to be Rosamond. XD I had such a great picture of her! And BeetleJuice made me laugh. XD overall, keep up the good work! -- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  04:00, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

XD!!!!!!!!! Thanks for the comment Reddy. Julie is very random and I tried to tune it down but it was really the rhyming that made her less random. I'm glad you don't like Collin. And I'm very happy you like Rosamond. She is my favorite character from Nate The Great and that book was very close to me in my childhood. I loved her cats too! Thanks for reading and thanks for doing the pics! Last Of The Gophers!!! 04:20, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

I love Ronda! "I said no cussing!" That cracked me up. You have a great way of keeping things light and fun without making them seem childish. I love the part when Julie goes "Too much Bee Gees!" If you would like I can draw up some character designs for new characters.Omg.Chacha is mah name, being sarcastic is mah game! 16:30, May 23, 2011 (UTC)


 * D! Thank You Chacha. I'm glad you think it's funny but not childish. I'm glad you thought Julie was funny. She was a joy to write for! And I'm glad you like Rhonda. I love her too XD And thank you for offering to draw some character designs but Reddy is going to do them. He has done Jovi and Rosamond! Last Of The Gophers!!! 23:25, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

I loved the first chapter, Rhonda! SG reminded me of myself IRL, of course. Chef being a contestant was a good idea and I'm glad you went with it. The song was pretty funny, and not half bad. :) Keep on writing TDWTH?, and I'll keep writing TD:PB! :P My name is Sierra-Cody now. It&#39;s hyphenated. 01:33, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

XD I tried to do SG as well as I could. I love Chef as a contestant and I loved writing the song! And on us writing our fanfcis; I wouldn't have it any other way (if that makes sense X3) Last Of The Gophers!!! 02:46, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

You've got a promising start, Rhonda. There are some grammatical/word choice stumbles, but polish will come with practice. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 04:29, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

Thank You Gideon! I things will only get better from here! I have never had god grammer and have had trouble expressing what I mean in words but I hope I improve. Last Of The Gophers!!! 05:16, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry I haven't done anything. I haven't given up but have been on a field trip for around 6 days and have had no computer acsess till now and am too tired to write. I hope to have it up by late tomorrow. Last Of The Gophers!!! 03:13, June 1, 2011 (UTC)

New chapter up! Finally XD. Three things I'd like to make clear. One I forgot to name teams so that will be done in Chapter 3. Two Do you guys think the words are too close? If so does anyone know how to fix that. Three if you that the ...... are short that is because I tried making them really long but they just stretched out in one HUGE line. Anyone who knows why and can help me please tell me! Last Of The Gophers!!! 03:41, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

Wow, I really liked the chapter! I got a little confused by it, though. It was really funny, especially Rosamond's cats. XD Rhonda and the AI judges were hilarious as well, and I loved the elimination because I hated Collin. SG was awesome, as always. :P XD The alliances were interesting, and I want to see how they do in teams. Can't wait for more, Rhonda! :D Ugh! This latte&#39;s cold! You&#39;re fired! 04:20, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

Rhonda, others have been having the same formatting problem as you. It looks like the wiki's rich text editor is introducing a bunch of extraneous formatting information when you paste in text from word processing software. Once it's in, all you can do is strip it out manually. (Switch to Source mode to see the unwanted formatting code.) To avoid getting all this formatting crap, switch the Edit window to Source mode before pasting. After you've pasted in your text, you can switch back to WYSIWYG mode (i.e. the rich text editor) if you want, and do any additional cleanup/refinement there before posting your edit.

Note, however, that Source mode handles spacing differently from WYSIWYG mode. Double-spaced paragraphs (i.e. one blank line between paragraphs) in Source mode becomes single spacing (actually, space-and-a-half spacing, which is what you want) in WYSIWYG mode; triple- or quadruple-spacing (i.e. 2 or 3 blank lines between paragraphs) in Source mode becomes double spacing in WYSIWYG; 4 or 5 blank lines in Source becomes triple spacing in WYSIWYG, etc. If you paste single-spaced paragraphs (i.e. only a line break, with no blank lines) into Source mode, the line breaks will be lost when you post, and you'll get a Wall of Text. Note also that, if you paste in Source mode, any italics and/or boldface in your original text may be lost, in which case you'll have to put that back in manually. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 05:08, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

I'm glad you liked the new chapter ShadowGeoff. If you got confused on something I don't blame you. I find the two things that bugged me most about this chapter was the fight scenes and the dialogue. The dialogue is funny but ending it with Rhonda says or such always confuses me because always write in script format (ex. Rhonda: blah blah). The fight scenes were hard to describe whether they were with monkeys or on the pedestal. It also lacked dialogue so it was kinda of harder to feel the mood I guess. If thats not what you got confused on please tell me so I can make sure I don't do it again. And thanks Gideoncrawle. I understand what your saying and I'm going to try it next time. I appreciate it very much! I think this might eliminate most if not all my problems with formatting. Last Of The Gophers!!! 16:57, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

I haven't commented yet? XD I read Chapter 3 a few days ago, but forgot to comment. I really liked how things go interesting with Gwen trying to tear Julie and SG apart. LeShawna's okay, but rather her than Julie. :P The challenge would've made me really hungry if I hadn't eaten breakfast before reading it. XD The judges were really funny, especially their sarcastic comments to each other. Keep up the good work! :D I really like this story. :) Don't be a rainbow,  be a flag.  -Lady Gaga.  01:44, July 13, 2011 (UTC)

XD Thanks for commenting. Unfortunately Gwen's trick isn't over yet. I didn't wanna eliminate LeShawna just yet but I wanted a girl to go and felt she was the most expandable. I loved Jenny and Toby and think they'll make the aftermath more fun. I'm glad you love it! Baby could we make a home in the stars, Baby somewhere in a galaxy far, Ohh, ohhh, ohh you're my future love &lt;3 03:43, July 13, 2011 (UTC)

I just realized... The really long team name is a reference to a bunch of wiki stuff. xD O.o -- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  19:56, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * The Killer (Canon reference)
 * Kleptomaniacal (TDO reference)
 * Top Banana Bottom Feeding (TD:TAS reference)
 * Perci (TD:PB reference)
 * OVER 9000 (TDS/DBZ reference)
 * Muskies (LTDI reference)
 * of Goth Magical Whatnot (???)
 * Globetrotting Locusts (TDL reference)
 * Studded (TDS reference)
 * Jumping (TDO reference)
 * Lemmings (???)
 * MEH BUKKIT League Of Super Justice (TDL reference)

Speaking of wiki references, although Rhonda didn't mention it in the Notes, I wonder if Izzy's disappearance (Chapter 2) might be a Legacy reference. In both stories, Izzy is believed to rest in a watery grave, although her body was never recovered; and Rhonda previously stated her intent to include allusions to a lot of other wiki stuff. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 04:36, July 16, 2011 (UTC)

Although it probably wouldn't have affected the outcome, due to the teamwork aspect of the judging, the Bulldogs didn't make the best use of their talent. The smarter thing to do would have been to put D.J. and Hatchet--presumably the team's best cooks--on different courses, with one on the omelet and the other on the crepes. Also, the initial description of Jenny sounds a lot like Izzy. (Hmm, I wonder...) There were undoubtedly a number of wiki allusions that I didn't recognize, since I'm sure we haven't read all of the same stories, I liked the references to the Courtney-bashing genre and the origin of Sunny D. (It bears mention, though, that Sunshine and I are now in some agreement that that my own competition story tells the real story of how Sunny D came to be.)

A couple of technical tidbits. First, there are a couple of places where you have a speaker change without a paragraph break. Second, and more importantly, the first three chapters have a number of errors in word choice. For example, you once said "excepted" when you clearly meant "accepted", and "excepts" when you meant "suspects". There are also several cases of saying "except", when you meant "expect". Also, you sometimes use "your" (the possessive) when you mean "you're" (the contraction of "you are") and "were" when you meant "we're" (the contraction of "we are"). While some of these errors may stem from confusion over what the words mean, I suspect that other cases are simply typos, in which case you may be relying too heavily on your word processer's automatic spell checker. If the misspelled word is also a real word, the spell checker won't catch it, and the grammar checker usually won't catch it either. That said, this is still an entertaining story, and I plan to stick with it. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 05:28, July 17, 2011 (UTC)

XD I'm glad you caught on to the team name. Goth is for Total Drama Tourism which had a team Goth plus I love goth characters. Magical Whatnot is the name of a team in Total Drama Culture. Lemmings came from one of Omg.Chacha's stories I was planning on reading but haven't done yet. And you were right Gideon, Izzy's death was an allusion to Legacy but I must have forgot to mention it in trivia. I was originally going to make her death the exact same as in Legacy but I don't know why I didn't. I see what you mean about DJ and Chef cooking different dishes but if they did they wouldn't have bonded and Chef wouldn't have apologized so they had to. Plot always trumps reason and sense! I thought you'd like the Courtney bashing stories. XD I loved that preview about Sunny and Duncan. I'm sorry they're so many grammer mistakes. I will fix them. XD It's funny because in the next chapter Rhonda was going to type and Julie was going to be watching over her shoulder and nit picking about it including her grammer. I'm glad you'll stick with it. I hope for it to get better. I also am hoping to have some television trope & idiom allusions and things that would fit certain tropes in the story as well. Baby could we make a home in the stars, Baby somewhere in a galaxy far, Ohh, ohhh, ohh you're my future love &lt;3 07:07, July 18, 2011 (UTC)

Winner Guessing Contest
Vote for who you think will win! Winner can choose someone to compete next time or make their own plus choose a contestant for an all star season if I ever get that far. XD Just pet your signature or name next to the name of the contestant you want to win. You may only vote once

Barbie-

Bradley-

Bridgette-

Chef-Just for the lulz.:P <font color="Orange">Got it memorized? <font color="Green">Got what memorized?  <font color="Orange">I have no idea.  19:26, May 26, 2011 (UTC)

Collin-

Cosmic River- Hippie Luv!  Being spotted by the paparazzi  It's Lindsay, not from TD!  16:37, July 28, 2011 (UTC)

Courtney-

DJ-

Duncan-

Geoff-

Gwen-

Heather-

Jovi-Omg.Chacha is mah name, being sarcastic is mah game! 16:27, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

Julie- I like girls who are hot hot hot  <font color="Blue">better than girls who are not not not  14:16, May 30, 2011 (UTC)

Justin-

LeShawna-

Lindsay-

Mikey-

Noah-

Nellie-

Rosamond--- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  11:37, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

SG- :P My name is Sierra-Cody now. It&#39;s hyphenated. 01:33, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

Sierra- TDAddict  - You know who he is,  and don't forget it. 22:39, May 26, 2011 (UTC)

Taylor-

Trent-

Final 3 Guessing Contest
List the names of who you think will be in the final 3. Whoever gets it right or closest (If I can determine that) will win. The winner gets the same prize for winning the winner guessing contest. You may change guesses and or guess again if you get it wrong. Leave your signature or name next to your guess.

SG, Jovi, Rosamond. Ugh! This latte&#39;s cold! You&#39;re fired! 03:32, June 8, 2011 (UTC)

SG, Heather, and Cosmic River  Being spotted by the paparazzi  It's Lindsay, not from TD!  16:38, July 28, 2011 (UTC)

Jovi, Julie, and Chef: for no other reason than because those three are my favorites that this point. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I--  00:03, July 30, 2011 (UTC)

Chapter Four chat
Rhonda, I don't know if you have last names for your characters, but I think Noforthwal (pronounced "No Fourth Wall") would be good for Julie. She seems to be your go-to character for Fourth Wall jokes, which may be why she's emerging as one of my favorites. (It might become tiresome in another story, but it works well in yours.) My other emerging favorite among the newbies is probably Jovi. I can see her getting into a friendly (or, at times, possibly not so friendly) rivalry with Courtney, because they're both alpha girls and the fact that they now seem to get along well needn't stop them jockeying for position. She didn't do well in the Jeopardy challenge, but maybe it just didn't play to her strengths. As for the vets, I had to chuckle at the way Lindsay got a critical question right because of something printed on her nail polish bottle. My own competition story will also plainly establish that Lindsay, for all her limited intellect on other matters, is something of an idiot savant when it comes to matters of beauty.

I noted with amusement the story's reference (via Julie, of course) to its own Talk page. I noticed that you copied part of one of my earlier comments verbatim. I'll suggest a revision, though, for the Legacy reference. The way you currently have it ensures that the reference won't escape anyone who's read Legacy, but you might consider making it a little more concise, which would also make it more cryptic and give it a little more of an in-joke quality (since you're probably going to list all the references in the Trivia section, anyway). For example, when Heather says she wouldn't mind if Gwen was dead, Julie could say something like, "Yeah, right. If she was dead, you'd probably name your baby after her." Heather would then think, even more than she did in the current version, that Julie's response was something from out of the blue.

As for the story itself, my only complaint about Chapter 4 was that the play-by-play of the wheel challenge was very repetitive. You should find a way to mix up the description a little.

And, finally, a tech tip: I don't think you use enough commas. Granted, most people don't use as many commas as they once did; but still, it's not a minor point, because there are situations where having a comma or not can change the sentence's meaning. An easy way to check comma use is to read the sentence either aloud or with "mental speech". If the line has any point where you naturally pause for a moment, consider putting a comma there. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I--  23:59, July 29, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks Gideon. I felt Julie was very funny in this chapter. And I love your idea for her last name. It actually helps for a joke I wanted to make in the next chapter. And I'm glad you like Jovi too. I agree Courtney and Jovi should continue having a rivalry. I'll work on it for the next chapter. And I'm glad you liked Julie said what you said from the talk page. I was afraid it would offend you. I don't know why I did but I don't want you or anyone upset by what I put. I'll edit the Legacy comment. I admit I could have wrote it better. And the wheel challenge defiantly wasn't interesting. I think it might be because of the lack of dialogue. I'll see if I can squeeze another joke in there. And I'll also check for commas. Sadly grammar is not my strength. That is one thing I have to go over. Thanks again Gideon I love reading your reviews! Be prepared for the murkiest scam! Meticulous planning, Tenacity spanning, Decades of denial, Is simply why I'll, Be queen undisputed! Respected, saluted, And seen for the wonder I am! 00:25, July 30, 2011 (UTC)