User blog:DJ Spenstar/TDP in-depth part 1: "Welcome to Total Drama Paradise"

I've been reading TDP over and I started to notice that many of the chapters aren't as detailed as they could be. For example, the challenge in Chapter one is only a short paragraph. I bet that if Nalyd were to right this fanfic today, among TDIn and TD:BI, TDP wouldn't do as well. No offense to Nalyd. So I thought to myself, why not take moments from each chapter and give them the Spenstar treatment? You know, stretch it out, detail it. So that's what I'm doing. Starting from day one:

In TDP it was:

They soon removed him and all of them went back to the dock. “Welcome back,” Nalyd said greeting the two tribes, “Your first challenge is too make fire. First tribe to get a fire three feet tall wins invincibility and pop-tarts. Ready, set, go!” The Thrashing Rabbits quickly gathered sticks and rocks, and began getting sparks, while Belle and Philip’s fighting, put out any fires that started. “The winners” Nalyd shouted, “are the Thrashing Rabbits! Fighting Ducks come to Tribal Council tonight.”

Here's the same moment from dat one with the Spenstar treatment:

The interns eventually took Lucas out of the confessional and returned him to the Fighting Ducks. Once the tribe was complete, the 22 castaways went back to the dock, where Nalyd was waiting for them. "Welcome back," he said, "It's time for your first challenge! You have to make a fire! The first tribe to make a fire three feet tall wins invincibility and pop-tarts! Ready, set, go!" The two ribes went to gather sticks and rocks. That is, except fo The Rat, who just laid back and relaxed as the rest of the Thrashing Rabbits, led by Cindy, gathered stuff.

The Fighting Ducks got a fire started forst. It was a small fire, but it was something. Then they heard Belle and Phillip fighting. Dyl shook his head in dissapointment. "Shut up, Phil! You're the ugliest, meanest guy ever!" yelled Belle, wrestling with Phillip.

"Nobody calls me Phil!" yelled Phillip back. "You're so weak and ugly, you make both medusa and "Ugly" look pretty! I could beat you up with both hands tied behind my back, if I could move them" Phillip continued to wrestle with Belle, until he knocked her onto the Ducks' fire, putting it out, and knocking out Belle. Dyl did a face-palm.

"Belle!" Martha rushed to her aid. "Are you okay?"

"She's out cold, no she's not okay!" commented Jazz. The two girls lifted belle off of the twigs and rocks where their fire once was. Then both girls glared at Phillip, who shrugged. Elian began to start a spark again despite the commotion, but by then, the Thrashing Rabbits had a fire over three feet tall, which was the goal. "The winners," said Nalyd, "Are the Thrashing Rabbits! Too bad for you, Fighting Ducks. I'll see your losing butts at Tribal Council tonight!" The Thrashing Rabbits cheered and went to get their pop-tarts, while the Fighting Ducks glared at Phillip and an unconcious Belle.

Phew! That took a while! Again, no offense to Nalyd or to TDP, but which one would you rather read? * flees before Nalyd finds out what I did*