User blog comment:Gideoncrawle/Writer's Workshop/@comment-1874924-20100418143554

TDIRM, I have mentioned before that I think your style is a pretty good one. I thought Violet Hill was stylistically a bit clumsy at times, but that stands to reason because (if memory serves) it was one of your earlier stories. The plot of The Penthouse had significant gaps, as you yourself have noted, but I liked the style in which that plot was presented. Among your stories that I have read, I still think that Back to Good presents the best total package.

So far, I haven't had time to do more than skim Selfish "Needs" but I do have one comment: as I noted in the opening remarks, I don't recommend flipping back and forth between narrators in a story that uses first-person perspective, although this may be as much a personal preference as anything else.