User blog comment:Fadingsilverstar16/New oneshot! :D/@comment-1637108-20091031021231

Lol. That's true.

I loved the one-shot. It's beautifully horrible; and there are so many paragraphs and scenes that are so well constructed that I'd like to kill you out of envy. XD

I think the rating should be R. As for the title, I like your original title.

I did spot a few mistakes though:

The prisoner's been stripped of his shirt and shoots murderous glare at his kidnapper

Shoots A murderous..., no?

 this time a small drop of blood, red and thick and beautiful in own repulsive way

An "its" between "in own", maybe?

as if the he's projecting all that's wrong

Is the 'the' missing something, or should just the 'the' be missing?

Other than that, excellent job!