User blog comment:Fadingsilverstar16/Run for the hills! The unthinkable has happened./@comment-1874924-20110303051102

I checked it out and, quite frankly, I had trouble getting through it. Keep in mind that it might just be me, because my DW hasn't been sleeping well of late, which means I haven't been sleeping well, either; and when I'm sleep-deprived, the first thing to go is my ability to concentrate. (That's also why I took a break from proofing your LAL chapter today.) Your prologue does have some very long sentences, which can require a fair amount of concentration to make sense of, and I found myself reading some sentences multiple times and still not really understanding what they said. I'll try again when I'm better-rested.

I checked out your profile on the site where you posted this story, and I noticed that you said you have a lot of books on your "to read" list. I'm going to suggest two more: Bambi and Bambi's Children, both by Felix Salten. If your only knowledge of Bambi comes from the Disney adaptation, you owe it to yourself to read the original. (Among other things, you'll get to meet Faline's brother, who wasn't in the movie.) As for the sequel, here's a trivia tidbit: LTDI's most intense action scene is based, in part, on a scene from Bambi's Children.

P.S.: I'm not familiar with the term, "edithammer".