User blog comment:Fadingsilverstar16/Quick update thingy!/@comment-1637108-20091014013818

I don't think I actually read it all in one day, I probably read the first seven or so and left the rest for the following day. I just used that expression because I meant to say that I had devoured it? I dunno. At the time, I was probably trying to come up with a coherent English sentence, so I didn't mean it literally. I think. Man I really need memory pills XD

I'm good at reviewing? Thanks! I wish I could review my own stories that well, but like you said, it's hard for a writer to criticize her own work.

I went and re-read that scene to be sure. Let's see. I liked it a lot, I think the metaphors and the contrast between the warmth of human contact and the coldness of steel were very powerful. The only thing I found there could be that you stopped a lot, as in, 'Then I was being moved. Lifted. Carried. Held.', which sort of paused the dramatic effect (I know that's the intention of the technique there), altering the flow a bit brusquely. I don't know if I put it well, but there you go.

That's really the ONLY thing I can criticize, I think, because other than that it was perfect and moving and beautiful and I lack enough words to express how awesome it was!

Sorry if this took too long.