User blog comment:Freefalling Lilacs/TDI-FYE- Robert, Cara, Victor, Irina, and a Sneak Peek/@comment-1874924-20110205061857/@comment-1874924-20110223034029

I did notice that, judging by the preview, you don't use enough commas in long sentences. A simple rule (albeit not the only one, and certainly not inviolable) is that, when you read a sentence, you should consider inserting a comma or other punctuation mark at any spot where you would naturally pause.