Talk:Michael's Love Story


 * D I'm kinda happy I'm the first to comment, but kinda disappointed. People should comment! This story rocked! It was extremely funny, it extremely suspenseful, full of great twists and plots and was very romantic!

The opening with the florist was great and it really drew me in. And I just love how Mounzer says it's not the worst thing that could happen, cause we already know crazy stuff is going to happen. But I really love how Michael says "Maria means something to me." It really shows that throughout Michael's whole story he has loved Maria and after reading the last story I literally have to say "Awwwwww!"

Another thing I have to compliment is the three sub plots between Michael, Mounzer and Moose. They each run very smoothly and written extremely awesomely. XD I can believe Moose forgot Valentine's Day. And I liked how you used a real band.

I find it very sweet that Michael spent his life savings on Valentine's Day for Maria although I kinda feel bad for Michael. Oh well, he finally got that girl so I guess it's worth it. I think Michaels' women troubles are very believable and love how Mounzer knows exactly what to say. I really feel bad for Mounzer's love troubles. One day you'll find love Mounzer!

XD I'm not familiar with the game Michael and Maria were playing but I find it funny. I also really like the narration, for the story in general, and loved how Bianca was introduced. I also love how subtle Bianca is when she says "I wish that was the only thing I was doing in those photos." XD I loved the Bank Robbing scene especially when Mounzer called. I also loved how the special surprise Michael planned played into this and how we were able to know what is was. I really loved how Michael had to prove his devotion to Maria and you can tell it is a struggle for Michael even if you haven't read the previous stories. I liked how Michael received advice from Brandon (who I found very funny and very like the original). The ending was very sweet and awesome and though I do feel bad for Bianca, I really loved that Maria and Michael got a happy ending. :)

I really liked Mounzer's subplot with Charlotte. He was really sweet and he really tried his best. I feel bad he was rejected but I found it hilarious that Brandon ended up being her date and felt how you used Brandon's character was very awesome and went smoothly.

I really like how you wrote Moose's story. Miranda's plan was one that you've seen before but didn't feel like you've seen it before. I really liked Moose actually meeting Travis Barker and Travis' story (is that true?). And I find it extremely funny how Moose took his advice. It was really romantic.

Sorry if my comment is a little long and rambly. I really loved the story though! :D Rhonda is the meanest, vilest, ugliest, stankiest, crankiest, won’t even say high to your momma, cheapest, creepiest, arrogant sea witch in all the seas! And I’m not very fond of her either.   04:58, February 26, 2012 (UTC)