Talk:Total Drama What The Heck?

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Polls
Which Team is your favorite? Team Indestructible The Bulldogs The Killer Kleptomaniacal Top Banana Bottom Feeding Perci OVER 9000 Muskies of Goth Magical Whatnot Globetrotting Locusts Studded Jumping Lemmings MEH BUKKIT League Of Super Justice (aka the Fun Bunch)

Who should have been eliminated? Taylor; She was moody and get prove to be a huge disadvantage in the future. It would be too dangerous. And she costed a part of the challenge. Trent; He hasn't done much and he threatened Taylor. Someone from The Bulldogs. Someone from TThe Killer Kleptomaniacal Top Banana Bottom Feeding Perci OVER 9000 Muskies of Goth Magical Whatnot Globetrotting Locusts Studded Jumping Lemmings MEH BUKKIT League Of Super Justice (aka the Fun Bunch).

How much did you like Chapter 6, on a scale of 1 to 5? 5 stars, I loved it! 4 stars, it was good. 3 stars, it was passable. 2 stars, I didn't like it that much. 1 star, I hated it!

What was your favorite part of the challenge? Shrimp On The Barbie The Boomerang Toss The Sheep Makeovers Netball The Kangaroo Race

Which kangaroo was your favorite? Bruce! Matilda! The Robot!

Did you enjoy Julie's segment? I loved it! :D It was pretty good. It was good It was ok It could have been written better It was bad I hated it!

What kind on nail polish would you choose? Pretty Priscilla Purple- Women are powerful, beautiful and regal. Why not have nail polish that reflects it? Ravenous Ruth Red- An artistic masterpiece in a bottle Ostonshing Ophelia Orange- A nail polish you’ll love and find you love. What’s not to love? Macabre Melinda Magenta- Rated M for Melinda, Rated B for Beautiful…and Blood Tasty Tsuyoshi Turquoise- The nail polish of a true strategist. Plus it goes great with bunny suits.

Imagine you were the captain of a team in a similar situation to Jovi. If you had to vote between two people like Trent and Taylor and your vote could only be for one of them and your vote decided who would go home, who would you chose? (Note: Not if you had to pick between Trent or Taylor but people similar to them.) Vote for my friend- They were very unhelpful in two challenge, their mood is unpredictable and could cost us future challenges which we don't want to risk. And if we do lose again they could be voted off then. As a captain I have to vote my friend off, it's the most strategic choice and what the team wants. Vote for my friend’s enemy- I made a promise and I feel guilty for what I have said to my friend. And my friend has been through horrible times. Plus they are my friend. I could ruin my friendship with them. voting off my friend would make me a horrible person. I'm voting for my friend's enemy, it is what is right.

Are you tired of all these polls. Not at all. I enjoy them! A bit. YES! Ha, I don't answer your polls. I can't read.

Favorite Old Contestant
Like the little preview says this show will have old contestants (the 26 or so contestants seen in TDI, TDA or TDWT). Please comment here who you would like to see. Only vote for one contestant. Like stated above you may vote for any contestant the original 22 campers, Sierra, Alejandro, Blainley or even Mr. Coconut. If you have anyone else please ask here and I'll decide. Thank You. Hiding Oreos in her bra. 03:00, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

GWEN! I hope it&#39;s candy! Or a whole bunch of shoes! Or shoes made of candy! 03:25, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

Noah. -w- &quot;I once saw him juggle a baby, a bowling ball, and an olive. It was made extra hard because the baby pooped.&quot; 12:36, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

Courtney! In my own little word, they all know me there... 00:31, April 27, 2011 (UTC)

Voting ends Monday!!! Last Of The Gophers!!! 22:56, May 20, 2011 (UTC)

I changed my mind. Voting is over. All 3 made it! I'll post all the old contestants on the page soon... Last Of The Gophers!!! 03:57, May 21, 2011 (UTC)

Original Contestant
I would like to use two original characters (designed by users) for the story. I will choose one boy and one girl. You may submit up to 2 characters (a boy and a girl) but I will only choose one of them. Use this format to enter your character. If you have any questions please leave them on my talkpage. I will try to write the characters best according to the guidelines you set out. Here is the format:

Name: Name

User: Username or signature

Stereotype: Goth, Cheerleader, Jock, Punk, etc.

Look: Clothes, Hair Color, and or Style, Eye Color, Skin Tone and anything else you think you need to put in.

Basic Description: Like something that maybe used for a bio (it does not have to be that long if you don't want it to be. Make it as long as you wish) or to help understand the character better so I know how to write for him or her.

Thank you, Rhonda

Name: SG

User: Shadowgeoff

Stereotype: The Shy Technopath

Look: The pic you see to the right.

Description: SG was always quite the shy person. He has only interacted with a few people from school, and is somewhat isolated at home. He feels much more comfortable talking to people online, as it "breaks the borders of speech, appearence, and you don;t have to tell anyone your own issues."

Name: Jessica

User: Omg.Chacha In my own little word, they all know me there... 00:31, April 27, 2011 (UTC)

Stereotype: The Smarty Pants

Look: Wears a pink shirt, jean capris, has long auburn hair, short in height, brown eyes, olive-ish skin tone. (not sure how to describe)

Basic Description: Jessica is just one of those girls, where after you talk to her, you feel like you need to locate the nearest dictionary. Jessica is a proud enforcer of rules, and likes to remind people that she's in charge. Even though she may come across as overbearing, she really is trying to help, and be a good person. Jessica is auditioning for Total Drama What The Heck because she wants to leave her mark on the world, and what better way than to be on TV? (P.S. I'm new to this so I'm very sorry if I did anything wrong!)

Congrats to ShadowGeoff and Omg.Chaca! You win! Hiding Oreos in her bra. 15:25, May 13, 2011 (UTC)



Chat
We all probably know what this is. Anyway I'd like to yay I finally did something. Any questions or comments (unless related to above categories) may be posted here. Thank You. Hiding Oreos in her bra. 03:05, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

OMG. I'm not the only one who has trouble with headings! :D XD Sorry, Rhonda. I hope it&#39;s candy! Or a whole bunch of shoes! Or shoes made of candy! 02:55, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

Yay, looking forward to this. I hope it's good. :3 &quot;I once saw him juggle a baby, a bowling ball, and an olive. It was made extra hard because the baby pooped.&quot; 12:36, April 23, 2011 (UTC)]

Thanks SG and Toad. I hope its good too. Hiding Oreos in her bra. 19:54, April 23, 2011 (UTC)

My favorite newbies are Barbie and Cosmic River. Barbie cuz I generally like Goth characters and Cosmic River cuz it's a cool nam. XD Also, I counted, and it seems the old contestants have 13 people while the newbies have 12. Is there a reason for this or is it just a goof? -- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  12:02, May 21, 2011 (UTC)

XD I didn't notice. It might have to do with fan contest. See Gwen, Courtney and Noah were all going to be in it. But I forgot about Noah. So I thought he was the 13 one. I wanted an uneven amount for... a reason but then I realized Noah was in it so I decided not to. But after checking over a blog post I realized someone had voted for Sierra so I decided to add her. I probably should have added a male newbie but I was really tired so I forgot. I'm not going to do it now as I think uneven will do fine and I don't have any ideas XD. Last Of The Gophers!!! 18:57, May 21, 2011 (UTC)

Wow! That was awesome! I liked the chapter, now a little critique on the newbies. Julie annoyed me at first, but I was glad when the rabdomness was toned down a bit. Collin, I could truly hear his annoying voice. XD But my favorite newbies of all, now that I've read, has GOT to be Rosamond. XD I had such a great picture of her! And BeetleJuice made me laugh. XD overall, keep up the good work! -- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  04:00, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

XD!!!!!!!!! Thanks for the comment Reddy. Julie is very random and I tried to tune it down but it was really the rhyming that made her less random. I'm glad you don't like Collin. And I'm very happy you like Rosamond. She is my favorite character from Nate The Great and that book was very close to me in my childhood. I loved her cats too! Thanks for reading and thanks for doing the pics! Last Of The Gophers!!! 04:20, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

I love Ronda! "I said no cussing!" That cracked me up. You have a great way of keeping things light and fun without making them seem childish. I love the part when Julie goes "Too much Bee Gees!" If you would like I can draw up some character designs for new characters.Omg.Chacha is mah name, being sarcastic is mah game! 16:30, May 23, 2011 (UTC)


 * D! Thank You Chacha. I'm glad you think it's funny but not childish. I'm glad you thought Julie was funny. She was a joy to write for! And I'm glad you like Rhonda. I love her too XD And thank you for offering to draw some character designs but Reddy is going to do them. He has done Jovi and Rosamond! Last Of The Gophers!!! 23:25, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

I loved the first chapter, Rhonda! SG reminded me of myself IRL, of course. Chef being a contestant was a good idea and I'm glad you went with it. The song was pretty funny, and not half bad. :) Keep on writing TDWTH?, and I'll keep writing TD:PB! :P My name is Sierra-Cody now. It&#39;s hyphenated. 01:33, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

XD I tried to do SG as well as I could. I love Chef as a contestant and I loved writing the song! And on us writing our fanfcis; I wouldn't have it any other way (if that makes sense X3) Last Of The Gophers!!! 02:46, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

You've got a promising start, Rhonda. There are some grammatical/word choice stumbles, but polish will come with practice. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 04:29, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

Thank You Gideon! I things will only get better from here! I have never had god grammer and have had trouble expressing what I mean in words but I hope I improve. Last Of The Gophers!!! 05:16, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry I haven't done anything. I haven't given up but have been on a field trip for around 6 days and have had no computer acsess till now and am too tired to write. I hope to have it up by late tomorrow. Last Of The Gophers!!! 03:13, June 1, 2011 (UTC)

New chapter up! Finally XD. Three things I'd like to make clear. One I forgot to name teams so that will be done in Chapter 3. Two Do you guys think the words are too close? If so does anyone know how to fix that. Three if you that the ...... are short that is because I tried making them really long but they just stretched out in one HUGE line. Anyone who knows why and can help me please tell me! Last Of The Gophers!!! 03:41, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

Wow, I really liked the chapter! I got a little confused by it, though. It was really funny, especially Rosamond's cats. XD Rhonda and the AI judges were hilarious as well, and I loved the elimination because I hated Collin. SG was awesome, as always. :P XD The alliances were interesting, and I want to see how they do in teams. Can't wait for more, Rhonda! :D Ugh! This latte&#39;s cold! You&#39;re fired! 04:20, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

Rhonda, others have been having the same formatting problem as you. It looks like the wiki's rich text editor is introducing a bunch of extraneous formatting information when you paste in text from word processing software. Once it's in, all you can do is strip it out manually. (Switch to Source mode to see the unwanted formatting code.) To avoid getting all this formatting crap, switch the Edit window to Source mode before pasting. After you've pasted in your text, you can switch back to WYSIWYG mode (i.e. the rich text editor) if you want, and do any additional cleanup/refinement there before posting your edit.

Note, however, that Source mode handles spacing differently from WYSIWYG mode. Double-spaced paragraphs (i.e. one blank line between paragraphs) in Source mode becomes single spacing (actually, space-and-a-half spacing, which is what you want) in WYSIWYG mode; triple- or quadruple-spacing (i.e. 2 or 3 blank lines between paragraphs) in Source mode becomes double spacing in WYSIWYG; 4 or 5 blank lines in Source becomes triple spacing in WYSIWYG, etc. If you paste single-spaced paragraphs (i.e. only a line break, with no blank lines) into Source mode, the line breaks will be lost when you post, and you'll get a Wall of Text. Note also that, if you paste in Source mode, any italics and/or boldface in your original text may be lost, in which case you'll have to put that back in manually. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 05:08, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

I'm glad you liked the new chapter ShadowGeoff. If you got confused on something I don't blame you. I find the two things that bugged me most about this chapter was the fight scenes and the dialogue. The dialogue is funny but ending it with Rhonda says or such always confuses me because always write in script format (ex. Rhonda: blah blah). The fight scenes were hard to describe whether they were with monkeys or on the pedestal. It also lacked dialogue so it was kinda of harder to feel the mood I guess. If thats not what you got confused on please tell me so I can make sure I don't do it again. And thanks Gideoncrawle. I understand what your saying and I'm going to try it next time. I appreciate it very much! I think this might eliminate most if not all my problems with formatting. Last Of The Gophers!!! 16:57, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

I haven't commented yet? XD I read Chapter 3 a few days ago, but forgot to comment. I really liked how things go interesting with Gwen trying to tear Julie and SG apart. LeShawna's okay, but rather her than Julie. :P The challenge would've made me really hungry if I hadn't eaten breakfast before reading it. XD The judges were really funny, especially their sarcastic comments to each other. Keep up the good work! :D I really like this story. :) Don't be a rainbow,  be a flag.  -Lady Gaga.  01:44, July 13, 2011 (UTC)

XD Thanks for commenting. Unfortunately Gwen's trick isn't over yet. I didn't wanna eliminate LeShawna just yet but I wanted a girl to go and felt she was the most expandable. I loved Jenny and Toby and think they'll make the aftermath more fun. I'm glad you love it! Baby could we make a home in the stars, Baby somewhere in a galaxy far, Ohh, ohhh, ohh you're my future love &lt;3 03:43, July 13, 2011 (UTC)

I just realized... The really long team name is a reference to a bunch of wiki stuff. xD O.o -- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  19:56, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * The Killer (Canon reference)
 * Kleptomaniacal (TDO reference)
 * Top Banana Bottom Feeding (TD:TAS reference)
 * Perci (TD:PB reference)
 * OVER 9000 (TDS/DBZ reference)
 * Muskies (LTDI reference)
 * of Goth Magical Whatnot (???)
 * Globetrotting Locusts (TDL reference)
 * Studded (TDS reference)
 * Jumping (TDO reference)
 * Lemmings (???)
 * MEH BUKKIT League Of Super Justice (TDL reference)

Speaking of wiki references, although Rhonda didn't mention it in the Notes, I wonder if Izzy's disappearance (Chapter 2) might be a Legacy reference. In both stories, Izzy is believed to rest in a watery grave, although her body was never recovered; and Rhonda previously stated her intent to include allusions to a lot of other wiki stuff. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 04:36, July 16, 2011 (UTC)

Although it probably wouldn't have affected the outcome, due to the teamwork aspect of the judging, the Bulldogs didn't make the best use of their talent. The smarter thing to do would have been to put D.J. and Hatchet--presumably the team's best cooks--on different courses, with one on the omelet and the other on the crepes. Also, the initial description of Jenny sounds a lot like Izzy. (Hmm, I wonder...) There were undoubtedly a number of wiki allusions that I didn't recognize, since I'm sure we haven't read all of the same stories, I liked the references to the Courtney-bashing genre and the origin of Sunny D. (It bears mention, though, that Sunshine and I are now in some agreement that that my own competition story tells the real story of how Sunny D came to be.)

A couple of technical tidbits. First, there are a couple of places where you have a speaker change without a paragraph break. Second, and more importantly, the first three chapters have a number of errors in word choice. For example, you once said "excepted" when you clearly meant "accepted", and "excepts" when you meant "suspects". There are also several cases of saying "except", when you meant "expect". Also, you sometimes use "your" (the possessive) when you mean "you're" (the contraction of "you are") and "were" when you meant "we're" (the contraction of "we are"). While some of these errors may stem from confusion over what the words mean, I suspect that other cases are simply typos, in which case you may be relying too heavily on your word processer's automatic spell checker. If the misspelled word is also a real word, the spell checker won't catch it, and the grammar checker usually won't catch it either. That said, this is still an entertaining story, and I plan to stick with it. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 05:28, July 17, 2011 (UTC)

XD I'm glad you caught on to the team name. Goth is for Total Drama Tourism which had a team Goth plus I love goth characters. Magical Whatnot is the name of a team in Total Drama Culture. Lemmings came from one of Omg.Chacha's stories I was planning on reading but haven't done yet. And you were right Gideon, Izzy's death was an allusion to Legacy but I must have forgot to mention it in trivia. I was originally going to make her death the exact same as in Legacy but I don't know why I didn't. I see what you mean about DJ and Chef cooking different dishes but if they did they wouldn't have bonded and Chef wouldn't have apologized so they had to. Plot always trumps reason and sense! I thought you'd like the Courtney bashing stories. XD I loved that preview about Sunny and Duncan. I'm sorry they're so many grammer mistakes. I will fix them. XD It's funny because in the next chapter Rhonda was going to type and Julie was going to be watching over her shoulder and nit picking about it including her grammer. I'm glad you'll stick with it. I hope for it to get better. I also am hoping to have some television trope & idiom allusions and things that would fit certain tropes in the story as well. Baby could we make a home in the stars, Baby somewhere in a galaxy far, Ohh, ohhh, ohh you're my future love &lt;3 07:07, July 18, 2011 (UTC)

Winner Guessing Contest
Vote for who you think will win! Winner can choose someone to compete next time or make their own plus choose a contestant for an all star season if I ever get that far. XD Just pet your signature or name next to the name of the contestant you want to win. You may only vote once

Barbie- Reddy took mine, too, and SG already picked SG. Barbie's an underdog, and revenge shall be sweet! JustLittleOlMe Lil   Jay JLOM   Mrs. Gideon  23:16, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Bradley- Gwen is SO overrated!! 02:30, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

Bridgette- Reddy took mine. :P --<font color="#00008B">HINT:A AWESOME USER, <font color="#D2691E">that loves Chatango and Chatting but wonders, <font color="#00FFFF">what's with Cyan? 02:20, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

Chef-Just for the lulz.:P <font color="Orange">Got it memorized? <font color="Green">Got what memorized?  <font color="Orange">I have no idea.  19:26, May 26, 2011 (UTC)

Collin-

Cosmic River- Hippie Luv!  Being spotted by the paparazzi  It's Lindsay, not from TD!  16:37, July 28, 2011 (UTC)

Courtney- If a canon character wins, it'll probably be her. And she'll have earned it! Frank15 06:00, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

DJ-

Duncan-

Geoff-

Gwen-

Heather- I wanted to pick a OC, but Julie and CR already pick. And Heather's my fav TD. Bruno!  Talk!   Editcount!  00:14, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Jovi-Omg.Chacha is mah name, being sarcastic is mah game! 16:27, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

Julie- I like girls who are hot hot hot  <font color="Blue">better than girls who are not not not  14:16, May 30, 2011 (UTC)

Justin-

LeShawna-

Lindsay-

Mikey-

Noah-

Nellie- <font color="Red">Jake:  Breathe, Feel, Love   Life  03:34, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Rosamond--- Spotted at the hottest shows, interview on Charlie Rose,  they all want a piece of you!  11:37, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

SG- :P My name is Sierra-Cody now. It&#39;s hyphenated. 01:33, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

Sierra- TDAddict  - You know who he is,  and don't forget it. 22:39, May 26, 2011 (UTC)

Taylor-

Trent- EnTrey likes peanut butter.

Final 3 Guessing Contest
List the names of who you think will be in the final 3. Whoever gets it right or closest (If I can determine that) will win. The winner gets the same prize for winning the winner guessing contest. You may change guesses and or guess again if you get it wrong. Leave your signature or name next to your guess.

SG, Jovi, Rosamond. Ugh! This latte&#39;s cold! You&#39;re fired! 03:32, June 8, 2011 (UTC)

SG, Heather, and Cosmic River  Being spotted by the paparazzi  It's Lindsay, not from TD!  16:38, July 28, 2011 (UTC)

Jovi, Julie, and Chef: for no other reason than because those three are my favorites that this point. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I--  00:03, July 30, 2011 (UTC)

Barbie, Chef and Mikey <font color="DarkMagenta">It's fun to spray yourself with mace, it's fun to squeeze your mother's face, it's fun to mow your daddy's grass, it's fun to break things made of glass!  02:23, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

Jovi, Bradley, and Chef Gwen is SO overrated!! 02:30, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

Rosamond, Barbie and Cosmic River, 'cuz they're nice :) JustLittleOlMe Lil   Jay JLOM   Mrs. Gideon  23:20, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Chapter Four chat
Rhonda, I don't know if you have last names for your characters, but I think Noforthwal (pronounced "No Fourth Wall") would be good for Julie. She seems to be your go-to character for Fourth Wall jokes, which may be why she's emerging as one of my favorites. (It might become tiresome in another story, but it works well in yours.) My other emerging favorite among the newbies is probably Jovi. I can see her getting into a friendly (or, at times, possibly not so friendly) rivalry with Courtney, because they're both alpha girls and the fact that they now seem to get along well needn't stop them jockeying for position. She didn't do well in the Jeopardy challenge, but maybe it just didn't play to her strengths. As for the vets, I had to chuckle at the way Lindsay got a critical question right because of something printed on her nail polish bottle. My own competition story will also plainly establish that Lindsay, for all her limited intellect on other matters, is something of an idiot savant when it comes to matters of beauty.

I noted with amusement the story's reference (via Julie, of course) to its own Talk page. I noticed that you copied part of one of my earlier comments verbatim. I'll suggest a revision, though, for the Legacy reference. The way you currently have it ensures that the reference won't escape anyone who's read Legacy, but you might consider making it a little more concise, which would also make it more cryptic and give it a little more of an in-joke quality (since you're probably going to list all the references in the Trivia section, anyway). For example, when Heather says she wouldn't mind if Gwen was dead, Julie could say something like, "Yeah, right. If she was dead, you'd probably name your baby after her." Heather would then think, even more than she did in the current version, that Julie's response was something from out of the blue.

As for the story itself, my only complaint about Chapter 4 was that the play-by-play of the wheel challenge was very repetitive. You should find a way to mix up the description a little.

And, finally, a tech tip: I don't think you use enough commas. Granted, most people don't use as many commas as they once did; but still, it's not a minor point, because there are situations where having a comma or not can change the sentence's meaning. An easy way to check comma use is to read the sentence either aloud or with "mental speech". If the line has any point where you naturally pause for a moment, consider putting a comma there. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 23:59, July 29, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks Gideon. I felt Julie was very funny in this chapter. And I love your idea for her last name. It actually helps for a joke I wanted to make in the next chapter. And I'm glad you like Jovi too. I agree Courtney and Jovi should continue having a rivalry. I'll work on it for the next chapter. And I'm glad you liked Julie said what you said from the talk page. I was afraid it would offend you. I don't know why I did but I don't want you or anyone upset by what I put. I'll edit the Legacy comment. I admit I could have wrote it better. And the wheel challenge defiantly wasn't interesting. I think it might be because of the lack of dialogue. I'll see if I can squeeze another joke in there. And I'll also check for commas. Sadly grammar is not my strength. That is one thing I have to go over. Thanks again Gideon I love reading your reviews! Be prepared for the murkiest scam! Meticulous planning, Tenacity spanning, Decades of denial, Is simply why I'll, Be queen undisputed! Respected, saluted, And seen for the wonder I am! 00:25, July 30, 2011 (UTC)

The first part of the challenge reads much better now. Julie's antics break up the repetitiveness, and your revisions of the play-by-play also helped in that regard. By the by, I took the liberty of going in and cleaning up a bit of obsolete formatting code that was left over after you edited the Legacy reference. I figured you wouldn't mind, and it was easier to do it myself than to tell you where to find it. Also, in your last comment (and somewhere in the story, too, if memory serves) you said "defiantly" when you meant "definitely". (Both real words, but unrelated meanings.) As for my reviews, I strive to give substantive feedback, because that's how a young writer improves. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 04:01, July 30, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks Gideon. I'm glad it is better. And thanks for cleaning that up. Also I'll fix that defiantly problem. And you definitely give substantive feedback :D Be prepared for the murkiest scam! Meticulous planning, Tenacity spanning, Decades of denial, Is simply why I'll, Be queen undisputed! Respected, saluted, And seen for the wonder I am!  05:33, July 30, 2011 (UTC)

Gideon I can't remember where I used defiantly but when I used find (which is something that finds words when you type it in) I couldn't find it. Hello, hello! It's me Picasso! I will spray my words of love. With your name on every wall. &lt;3 05:25, July 31, 2011 (UTC)

I couldn't find it, either, so I must have seen it somewhere else. And I'm very familiar with the browser's Find function, since that's how I expect readers to navigate TDI-G&amp;S. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 17:32, July 31, 2011 (UTC)

Chapter Five/Six chat
Awwww. Julie. DDD: She was totally my favorite, and now I'm out of the winner guessing contest. I hope she returns like Izzy, although there are so many characters that I doubt it. But anyways, Dora was hilarious and I loved the references to TDR in Rhonda's dream. <font color="DarkMagenta">It's fun to spray yourself with mace, it's fun to squeeze your mother's face, it's fun to mow your daddy's grass, it's fun to break things made of glass!  13:52, August 6, 2011 (UTC)

I'm glad you miss Julie Toad. Julie elimination was super unfortunate and I know a few people don't like her leaving. But maybe she will come back but probably not :P Im glad you like Dora. She'll be soon again sometime. And I was hoping you would like the TDR references. It was based on my favorite chapter of TDR and was probably the best part of the whole dream and probably the chapter. Thanks for commenting. Hello, hello! It's me Picasso! I will spray my words of love. With your name on every wall. &lt;3  18:45, August 6, 2011 (UTC)

So far, that's my favorite TDR chap too! I started planning it before TDTJ started. :B <font color="DarkMagenta">It's fun to spray yourself with mace, it's fun to squeeze your mother's face, it's fun to mow your daddy's grass, it's fun to break things made of glass!  18:49, August 6, 2011 (UTC)

XD It's just so funny. My second might be the TV-athon but I'm not sure. Hello, hello! It's me Picasso! I will spray my words of love. With your name on every wall. &lt;3 18:53, August 6, 2011 (UTC)

I couldn't help noticing that Rhonda gets punched a lot in her dream. Do I detect a bit of a persecution complex, perchance? On the other hand, dream sequences have never been required to, you know, actually make sense.

As for Julie, "I have the power to break the fourth wall" indeed. (In superhero terms, I guess that would make her a reality warper.) I was surprised to see her go this early, but she went out in a blaze of something resembling glory. Chapter 5 was a real Julie showcase. (And I liked the way you worked in the Ruddigore verse.) Something tells me that we haven't seen the last of her, so I'll stick with my original Final Three guess for now. In the meantime, it looks like Nellie will be your new standard bearer for offbeat humor. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I-- 04:39, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

I'm glad you liked the dream. That was my favorite scene. Julie's elimination is the saddest I may ever to write :( But you are right. She went out in a blaze of something resembling glory. Chapter 5 was meant to show Julie love. Julie was gonna have her own theme song in here but I felt she had done enough singing. And I'm glad you liked the Ruddigore verse. It was fun to put in. And who knows? Julie could come back so sticking with your Final Three guess is a good idea ;) Nellie will definitely be more offbeat but I hope more characters will get spotlight as well. Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  04:56, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

On the other hand, it could be argued that Julie did have a theme song of sorts. It worked for Izzy, and it works for Julie. In any case, if Julie returns, maybe we'll see your Julie theme song then, or maybe she'll sing it in the Aftermath. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I--  05:15, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

I don't think Julie will have a theme song. It was going to be just a mash up of other songs but more Julie like. I did that and it was funny. And she might sing more song parodys. But I don't think it will be a theme song. Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  05:18, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

Some of the "it's/its" changes you just made were right the first time. "Its" is a possessive, so you would use it when you're talking about something (either an item or an abstract quality) belonging to something that you happen to be referring to as "it". If you're contracting "it is", which is what you're doing in the vast majority of cases, then you want "it's". Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O!  Sing me your song, O!  A wandering minstrel, I--  02:09, August 17, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks Gideon. I'm going to fix that right now. Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  02:11, August 17, 2011 (UTC)

JULIE!!! I love your story and can't wait for next chapter. :D --<font color="#00008B">HINT:A AWESOME USER, <font color="#D2691E">that loves Chatango and Chatting but wonders, <font color="#00FFFF">what's with Cyan? 02:17, August 17, 2011 (UTC)

Aw thanks :D I really appericate the comment. And I miss Julie to! XD The new chapter should be up soon. Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  02:22, August 17, 2011 (UTC)

IM SUPER EXCITED!!! I CANT WAIT TO READ! GOING TO READ RIGHT NOW! ITS GOING TO TAKE AN HOUR! --<font color="#00008B">HINT:A AWESOME USER, <font color="#D2691E">that loves Chatango and Chatting but wonders, <font color="#00FFFF">what's with Cyan? 01:02, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

I'm so glad your excited Webly! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD! It is long. Maybe my longest so far. But I hope you enjoy it! Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  01:09, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

It was a great chapter and I have so many things to say. I THINK BRIDGETTE GOT THREE LINES! XD, shocker. I was kind of surprised Taylor went. I thought it would of been one of the characters without much development like Bridgette. Cosmic River's past was mind boggling and I really liked it. Rosamond is epic in the chapter and Gwen and Duncan breaking up wasn't expected. I honestly didn't think it was really in Courtney's character to be so supportive but hey, it's not my story. Characters that you need to work on from this point are Chef, Bridgette, and Geoff (who I don't really care for). Really great chapter but too long. Try to make it a little shorter in the future. --<font color="#00008B">HINT:A AWESOME USER, <font color="#D2691E">that loves Chatango and Chatting but wonders, <font color="#00FFFF">what's with Cyan? 19:10, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

XD I'm glad you like that Bridgette got a little more screen time. I wanted to give her more but I wasn't sure how. Bridgette will get more screen time, it just hasn't gotten to there yet. I will wrok hard to expanding upon her for you Webly :3 Taylor was suprising but it was for the plot (sorta) and I wanted to use Jovi to show how tough being a leader can be like in this sitution. I'm proud of how Jovi did. Taylor was originally going to be third and I couldn't find a good place for her to go either. Cosmic River's past was one of my favorite parts about this chapter and I really like writing for him now and have some new ideas for him. I also feel like Rosamond was very big in this chapter and I loved that. Gwen and Duncan was to seem unexpected and I felt it as needed. Chef does need some work but I have trouble writing for him because I'm not good with his speech. I will work on Bridgette and will try with Geoff. Sorry it was so long but a lot of plot had to be done but the challenge was in five parts and there might be a little too much comic relief. Thanks so much for the reply Webly :DDDDD! Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  20:42, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

Where's Chapter 6 chat? xD So let's start: I really liked the chapter. It was pretty good. I loved the sheep makeover. And the Kangaroos. :3 Well, I didn't liked Taylor that much, she was kinda annoying, and she screwed up in the challenge. I would vote for her, instead of Trent. Julie's segment is AWESOME. I loved it (well, it was Julie, and is writen by Rhonda, it's obviously hilarious). Saint Pepper is epic. I'm so happy that Julie liked my gifts. :D This Rebecca Black doll is freaking annoying, but not as much as the real one. IWantMySG15 is so dead. xD I loved her segment. Bruno!  Talk!   Editcount!  00:15, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

XD Thanks for commenting Bruno :DDDD! And thanks for entering the WGC (Sorry CR and Julie are taken. Are they my fav OCs? :P). That is a good question so I changed it to five/six. I'm super glad you liked the chapter. The sheep makeovers and kangaroos probably were the best parts because they were a little less anti climatic and much funnier. I'm glad you won't miss Taylor. She was annoying and she did screw up again though she wasn't the only one who didn't win their part of the challenge (though she gave no effort). And I'm so glad you loved Julie's segment :DDD! I feel so flattered by your comment on being writen by Rhonda. Saint Pepper was so much fun. He and Mr.Coconut will appear again. And I loved your gift ideas. XD What you said about Rebecca Black is funny and true. And yes IWantMySG15 is so dead. I think her segment stole the whole episode. I might do another segment with Julie. Thanks for commenting Bruno and I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter :D! Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  03:07, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

XD Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you still like Chef. And I'm glad you don't miss any of the eliminated contestants (you don't miss Julie though? :O). I'm glad you love all the humor and hope you'll like what you read in the future! Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  19:41, October 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * has been inactive for like a month lol* I have still been reading this, and I'm finally commenting! :D I'm glad Chef is still in. As for the eliminated contestants so far...I don't miss any of them too much. I'm so excited for more! :D :P I love the comedy and allusions in this storeh :3 <font color="Orange">Got it memorized? <font color="Green">Got what memorized?  <font color="Orange">I have no idea.  23:29, October 1, 2011 (UTC)

First of all, Julie is incredible. You know that, I'm sure. She's actually a lot deeper than Izzy, and funnier! Julie is completely awesome, and deserves her popularity! And yay for that random, out-of-nowhere Julie segment in the latest chapter!

I like a lot of the other original characters, too. I don't really dislike any... well, Collin was sorta' annoying, and I feel bad that I often forget Mikey's there. For some reason, he doesn't stand out the same. Probably doesn't help that he hangs with such hyperactive people already as it is =P

If I counted correctly, Bridgette has had nineteen lines in the story so far. That's actually more than I was expecteing XD It's not like I'm any good at balancing everyone, and my favorite author isn't that good at it either, so it's all good, but just sorta' fun to notice. I keep forgetting she's there until she talks ;)

It wasn't just Bridgette, but a few characters feel just sorta' there. Which is something I have a tendency to do too, so I don't want it to sound like I'm insulting you, but it's pretty obvious which characters you enjoy writing for more than others. Heh... to some extent, it almost feels like Courtney and Sierra are the only two canon characters in the story ;)

Courtney's incredible here, and it feels like you get her! So nice when so many people despise the poor girl. *sniff* It's so nice reading a non-evil Courtney, but a nice girl who's got a few issues.

Gwen... I'm kind of surprised, but I wound up feeling a bit bad for her. Even as unbearing and cruel as she was earlier in the story, I felt bad for her in the latest chapter. I guess it helps that Gwen's realized that she's got faults, too. It's too bad she just missed out on coming clean before everyone else found out, though.

It was sad, what happened between Taylor and Trent. All just a huge mess of miscommunication between them. And now Taylor's gone. *sniff* Poor Taylor. And poor Trent too, really. You make me like Trent more than I'd ever liked him on the show =D

I'm betting Barbie reminds Heather of herself.

Ooh, ooh! Are we ever going to get to see what Jenny and Toby look like? They seem important enough to see! Unless the vulture killed them. Then maybe I don't want to see their gory remains o_O

Anyway, awesome story! You know that, though =D Frank15 05:44, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Rhonda, I love how you make so much fun of yourself! I'm superglad that Julie showed up again, and such strange things she gets from her fans! :O Also, I felt a bond with Lindsay's Rose and Rosamond's Matilda. Kudos and thanks! I liked Taylor, but she was forever crying, and I hope Trent gets a girlfriend. I laughed and laughed and laughed through all of chapter 6! Are Jenny and Toby based on someone here or someone you know? Or none of the above? Thank you for a FANtastic chapter!!! Ooooh, and I LOVED that crazy singing doll that Julie couldn't kill. Hmmm...I wonder what movie that reminds me of? *evil maniacal laughter!* XD JustLittleOlMe Lil   Jay JLOM   Mrs. Gideon  23:33, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

@Frank Thanks for commenting :D! I'm so glad you love Julie! :DDDD Julie has to be everyone's favorite. I'm glad you didn't like Collin (I hate him D:<) and I know Mikey can be forgetful. I hope to make him more memorable as the show continues but who knows. Bridgette is really forgettable but that will change. I agree that Courtney and Sierra fell like the only canon characters. I love writing a nice Courtney I doubt that will change. And I'm glad you choose her for WGC. Gwen has gone through a lot for only 6 chapters XD and will go through more. I'm glad you like Trent :D! I feel he hasn't been given much justice. Yes Barbie does remind Heather of herself and we'll see that later through the story. I'm glad you like Jenny and Toby. I'll see if I can get Reddy to draw a picture.

@ JLOM Thanks for commenting Ms. Gideon :D! XD I do make fun of myself a lot. I know one part in the story (I think chapter 4) everyone just randomly insults me and think Julie says something about generic insult about Rhonda or something. I know that was a bit of a spoof on how the hosts (and often the writers as hosts) are portrayed as really dumb, creepy and weird. Of course I am all those things :P. I think I'm only there to create comic relief. I loved Julie's segment. XD The fans gave some crazy things but I think that is perfect for Julie ;D I think most of those things will appear in the story again. I'm gad you felt a bond (Rosamond's kangaroo is Bruce but I honestly got confused on those as well). I'm not sure what the Kudos is for but your welcome :D! Sorry Taylor had to go but she did and Trent might get a girlfriend but I won't tell. I was glad you laughed so much (I try). Jenny and Toby came from a script I wrote after finishing a project in science in school last year. I don't know how I came up with them but I loved them and thought they would be funny as new aftermath hosts. XD I loved your pun. XD And that crazy singing doll was awesome but I don't know what movie your talking about (*shifts eyes back and forth) :P. XD I like you picked Barbie. Oh, come on. I bought KFC. It pretends to be southern, you pretend to be southern. Don't go there!  02:52, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

I love your spoof on hosts. I'm glad Jule and her craziness will reappear. Rose, Bruce and Matilda are sweet animals, and the kudos were for giving all the animals a nice big part in that chapter. (Reminds me of someone else writing about animals, but I can't remember who;) I like Jenny and Toby (and the vulture. :) Julie could name her revolting doll Upchuck, since she hates - *singer's name here* - so much. :) Yay Barbie! :D

Gideon told me this was a long chapter. After I read it he told me how long - 20,000 words!! :o I was wondering why it took me helf the day to read! It was completely worth my time, though, and I am truly grateful for all of this! :D JustLittleOlMe Lil   Jay JLOM   Mrs. Gideon  19:37, October 5, 2011 (UTC)