User blog comment:Mrdaimion/FU Acceptance Blog/@comment-2021069-20110802011609

Congratulations on both winning and the 1000 edits! And thank you so much for mentioning TDI:FYE. I really didn't expect it to be mentioned at all, especially over the other huge stories on the list, and your compliments were just wonderful... I seriously owe you something!

As for the story description, I'm a real sucker for super power stories because I'm a nerd at heart. The X-men are my favorite comic book heroes, and the plot definitely looks like something I would love to read. And I totally caught that the gambler's name is Remy... is that a Gambit reference or just an ironic coincidence?

As for the preview itself, I liked it a lot. The one thing that might make it more enjoyable might be not having a constantly switching POV. It might seem like a good idea now, but I know that as a reader (and as a writer who's attempted it before) it gets a bit obnoxious to have to remember who's speaking at what time. Maybe you can pull it off, but choosing only one person's point of view to use or writing only in the third person might be a better choice. Other than that though, I really liked the concept and the characters you mentioned.