User blog comment:Bocaj910/Bocaj's 13th Birthday 4000th Edit Spectacular!/@comment-1874924-20100913025148

Interesting preview, with good descriptive color. Some of the phrasing is a little clumsy, but polish will come with practice.

A technical tidbit: Newfoundland and Ontario are both Canadian provinces, so saying "a small town in Newfoundland, Ontario" is like saying, "a small town in Alabama, Texas".