After each chapter, I will post a poll. Be sure to vote!
Winner guessing Contest
The rules are simple, leave your signature on who you want to win. No changing your guess after it's been made. The prize is that the user who wins gets to pick someone to be in All-Stars! No choosing the winner, though. Everyone still in, please let me know beforehand who you want in All-Stars. TAU, Reddy, and Tdifan, I need to know who you want in All-Stars.
Darci - Mrodd 21:50, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
Hunter -- The Anonymous User 21:59, April 17, 2010 (UTC) (CONGRATULATIONS, TAU!)
Kimmy - Webly
Ulysses - Koops
This is where I tell you stuff. XD Goldenshane 20:51, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
Sorry for not getting a chapter up for two weeks. I'll try to get the chapters up more frequently. Goldenshane 18:39, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
You did do a better job on the character images for this story.--Bocaj910 21:36, December 5, 2009 (UTC)
Thanks Bocaj, you've gotten better since you've started too. --Goldenshane 21:46, December 5, 2009 (UTC)
I really think I have a lot. Thanks :) --Bocaj910 21:52, December 5, 2009 (UTC)
You're welcome Bocaj. --Goldenshane 21:57, December 5, 2009 (UTC)
I really liked the intro chapter. It was a pretty good start. I'm rooting for Andrea, for obvious reason. :) BocaJ is Here! I decided to ditch the month signatures... Because I did! 21:33, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
So far so good! The team names are definitely...different, but not bad by any means. I am thinking Hunter will win it...I don't know why, he just feels like a winner (either him or Ulysses). Keep up the good work!- The Anonymous User 22:00, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks! The team names are based off of things in the production field. The animators are obvious. But the Rough Cuts a preliminary trial stage in the process of editing a film. Shots are laid out in approximate relationship to an end product without detailed attention to the individual cutting points. Basically, a type of film editing. Goldenshane 22:04, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
I really, really, really enjoyed the first chapter. I think it flowed a lot nicer than some of your earlier chapters of the last story. I can already tell that you plan on developing and making these characters complex without throwing it all out there, right away, or suddenly. I definitely look forward to it. I think Bobby Jon and Tyson stand out to me so far. I think that if Bobby Jon isn't out first, he'll make it very far. XD SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 14:55, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Steven! =) Goldenshane 21:30, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
Wait a sec...what just happened? Why did they vote for Clark, he didn't do anything wrong that I remember.- The Anonymous User 00:59, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
I liked the chapter. I take it Clark was eliminated for not being friends with the majority of people? Well, at least he raised my awareness of Parcore. XD Nice hot dogging thing you threw in there. I'm not quite sure who I like, yet, but I do like Darci. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 03:43, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks for the comments guys. The reason Clark was eliminated is because Clark hurt Alexander's ego. Jerry practically explains that at the end. Goldenshane 13:47, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
Good first two chapters...I enjoyed it. Monica or Peter might be my favorite, I'm not sure which one yet. Kimmy doesn't really look like a downer, but I can sense it in her attitude. Anyways, I enjoyed it. A teeny bit disappointed that Alexander left, but I guess he was a lousy leader, after all. Keep up the good work, Shane. --TDIFan13 (My Talk and My Contributions!) 06:09, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
Clark was the one who left...XD But thank you! I truly appreciate your comments. Goldenshane 13:39, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
Great chapter bro! I must comment on one particular quote though. (“Well, Ulysses would just take charge, and Andrea…I don’t know why, but I just don’t trust her.” Peter answers.) Good call, Peter, good call. Stay away from that girl! xD! You know I'm just messin, Shane, but still... xD --DJ Spenstar! 21:48, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
Great chappy, Shane! It was long, but, I like long chapters. Good way of referencing Jayco, and I think Ulysses could be mentioned by Jayco, as a cousin of his. The challenge was really creative, and I liked it a lot. Good job, Shane. :)
So, another one bites the dust...Freddie will be missed by all (well, by me anyway). I think after this chapter, I like Jerry, Peter and Zubin better than I did before, not to mention my hopeful attitude towards the formerly annoying Rosa. Nice work dude!- The Anonymous User 23:11, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU. Spenny, I see you're still mad about me stabbing you in the back in the IRC. XD JK. Anyway, Jacob, thanks for your kind words. I tried hard to make the Jayco part good. Anyway, thanks for you guy's kind words. I'm glad you guys liked the chapter. Goldenshane 23:49, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
Good chapter. I think my favorite part was Freddie's exchange with Hunter, early on in the chapter. It was the kind of emotion I usually like. I really, really liked Freddie. He has my favorite image that you've made. XD SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 00:14, June 2, 2010 (UTC)
I liked it, too. I was actually surprised that Rosa went, I thought the others would turn on Peter. I also thought his list was going to be something else. I'm not sure what, but that's my usual Sprink deeper meaning senses. Anyway, good job on the chapter. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 02:12, June 13, 2010 (UTC)
I'm glad Rosa's gone. She ticked me off, but so does her namesake. I have to say, I like the Animators' winning streak, as it keeps Hunter in the game longer!- The Anonymous User 02:17, June 13, 2010 (UTC)
I am an idiot...Hunter has been on the losing team and I knew that! I think I was referring to Jerry, and had a brain-fart...duh...- The Anonymous User 02:26, June 13, 2010 (UTC)
It's okay TAU, we still love you. XD Goldenshane 16:51, June 23, 2010 (UTC)
I liked the new chapter. :) Tyson was pretty funny in it. There was a scene that I relate to, but I forgot what it was since it was early on. XD I really liked the story between Kimmy and Bobby Jon. Pretty sad. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 22:18, June 26, 2010 (UTC)
I read chapter four, and I'm going to read chapter five soon. I noticed three typos. At one point, Ulysses or Andrea said something about their strategy, but you said that Peter said it. I know he didn't say it, as he was talking about eliminating himself. Also, at one point near the end Kimmy talked, but you instead said Rosa did. And during the end with Nancy and Peter, Nancy said, "Are why did you eliminate Rosa?" Great chapter. I loved it. Interesting strategy with the players. I look forward to read chapter five... So I will, right now. BocaJ is Here! I decided to ditch the month signatures... Because I did! 21:46, July 1, 2010 (UTC)
I absolutely loved chapter five, just like I love the story. You really have a great group of characters this season. It's already a lot better then Craziness. You're getting better, my friend. :) BocaJ is Here! I decided to ditch the month signatures... Because I did! 22:16, July 1, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Jay! I guess I'm doing something right. XD Goldenshane 02:22, July 5, 2010 (UTC)
I actually thought Alexander was going to be eliminated, but I'm really glad it was Jerry. I find Alexander to be a lot more interesting, with a lot of possible story lines. Anyway, nice job with the chapter. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 04:30, July 10, 2010 (UTC)
Read the latest! It was really good. There was a whole lot of angst and confrontations... A whole lot. Do you ever have any happy kids in your stories? XD Stephanie and Monica was interesting. Tyson was funny, as usual. Of course, I'm not a fan of superstition... Anyway, good job with the chapter. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 14:01, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks you guys! About the anger and stuff...if you thought that was bad...you shoulda saw how Monica was originally gonna be eliminated. Hint hint, Topher incident. Anyway, about Stephanie and Monica, I really hope I did not offend anyone with Stephanie saying the labels and all. It was meant to show Steph's hypocritical nature. About the superstition, I don't either, but this is a cartoon show...plus, I figured I needed more comedy in a comedy show spoof. XD Goldenshane 16:31, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
I really liked the latest chapter. I liked the stuff about Ulysses feeling like he's no good at challenges, especially. No huge opinion on Heidi. I wasn't a huge fan, but I didn't mind her. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 23:44, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
I just caught myself up on the last few chapters, and I must say some pretty intense stuff went down! I will miss Jerry and Monica, but Heidi didn't do it for me. I must say, I'm shocked that Steph of all people turned out to be a homophobe! She seemed to be the accepting type but I guess not.- The Anonymous User 00:32, July 27, 2010 (UTC)
.*Doesn't look at spoilers* I just read chapter six. Great job on it. :) I was sad to see Jerry go... I really am sick of Alexander. As of now, I'm rooting for Zubin. Well, I'll be sure to read the other two chapters soon enough. :) BocaJ is Here! I decided to ditch the month signatures... Because I did! 00:31, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
Nice job on the latest chapter, Shane. I really am starting to like the story, a whole lot. The conflict is interesting, the development is great, and... more greatness! IDK what to say about Stephanie, or Monica. All I can say is that I liked Monica more, due to Stephanie's homophobic behavior. Great job! BocaJ is Here! I decided to ditch the month signatures... Because I did! 17:27, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
I finally am catched-up with TD:TP, and I must say, you are doing an incredible job with the story. Heidi... I liked her a lot, but I won't miss her too much either. I think I'm actually starting to like Alexander. You're doing a good job at giving these characters real emotions. BocaJ is Here! I decided to ditch the month signatures... Because I did! 20:45, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Jacob! I really am trying my hardest to do a good job on this story. I do feel like it's already WAY better than Craziness ever was. About Steph and Monica, I was worried about that scene, but no one seemed to mind it so, yay! XD Goldenshane 21:10, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
Dueling with pool noodles isn't dumb at all! I liked the challenge idea, though it reminded me of the watermelon stick duel in TDBI. I wasn't expecting Hayley to go home in this one at all, but I don't mind as she was never a character I liked that much. One last thing: Is Zubin bisexual and in denial? He claims to not be gay, and seemed genuinely attracted to Darci, but also claims to be attracted to guys. That sounds like someone who is bi to me.- The Anonymous User 00:14, August 10, 2010 (UTC)]
He's not bi, the thing is, it's complicated. He is attracted to guys, but he fights the feelings. Like I said, it's complicated, don't worry, I know what I'm writing for. I'll just say this, no, he's not bi-sexual. Oh, and thanks for the compliment! Goldenshane 00:22, August 10, 2010 (UTC)
There are cases TAU where attraction is there, when the person isn't actually gay or bi. More like a crush, or something like that. I liked the chapter. It had a lot of stuff going on, and a lot of reveals. *wonders why Bobby Jon was unaffected by the noodle between the legs* I think Alexander will be able to have kids. Not sure about Brad, Reeve, or Quintin, who got hit there with metal, a paintball, and a dodgeball full of rocks. XD But it is supposed to be based on cartoons. I knew Hayley would go home, when she started targeting someone. I'm glad she went, honestly. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 00:25, August 10, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks for explaining it, Sprink. About Bobby Jon...um...that will be adressed in the next chapter! Yeah, let's go with that. XD The original reason Hayley was gonna go home was really....corny. I thought, why not make it interesting, I hope I did just that. Goldenshane 00:34, August 10, 2010 (UTC)
Great chapter this week! I loved the Majora's Mask reference (My favorite Zelda game of all time!!), and the Hunter/Bobby Jon scene in the beginning. I think my opinions of some of the characters are shifting around: I am liking Andrea a lot less, and Bobby Jon a little more. Also, I still think Zubin might be bi or something and only just discovering it/still struggling with the awkward feelings. I know it has been described as something else, but one of my good friends is bi and he has told me some of his experiences and they remind me of Zubin...but a bit less erotic (why would he watch gay porn if he didn't want to feel the way he does?). You are describing Zubin's feelings as very much like how a fetish is described, but I have never heard of a fetish like that before. I know fetishism can be similar to sexuality in certain ways, so maybe that's it. Anyways, I will move on from that subject now.
The jury has started, but not the merge, which is sorta the opposite of what happened in TDAll-Stars (the jury started a few chapters into the merge), but I do have a feeling that the merge is coming up soon. Looking forward to that! The merges are usually the fun part of the competition, at least for me, and most of my faves, sans Monica and Jerry, are still in. Hunter, Zubin or Ulysses FTW!!- The Anonymous User 20:08, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! I finally got a large comment from you! And an awesome poll thingy answer from you! YAY! I'm doing something right! XD Anyway, Zubin, as I've said before, is complicated. As for porn, I really don't want to get into that stuff, but I guess I should explain. Porn, is addicting. Basically, Zubin started watching/seeing gay porn. All the while, knowing that it was wrong, but at the same time, it drew him, like a magnet. That's actually how porn in. It's like a magnet, it draws you in. Zubin knows it's wrong, and he wants out of it, but it's tough because it's like an addiction. In other words, he wants out, but because he's addicted, he can't stop. He just can't. Trust me, TAU, I know what I'm writing for. It's complicated, but in due time, you'll understand...I hope. XD Goldenshane 20:14, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
Yeah, I trust you know what you're doing. You don't seem to be the type who writes about stuff like that without background, so I'll believe you. The reason I doubted you at first is because I have some background about sexuality and fetishism from some stuff in my own life with people I know and stuff. That's all a side issue anyway, as this story seems to be the kind that is stuffed with drama from all different sides and angles. Each contestant has their own stuff to deal with, and it can get heavy sometimes, but I do enjoy it! Keep up the good work!- The Anonymous User 20:19, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! Thanks for trusting me with what I'm writing. About the heavy stuff, my next season won't be as heavy, trust me on that. XD This season's the one where I want to challenge myself. Next season...will be a break. XD Anyway, thanks for enjoying it TAU! Goldenshane 20:30, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Sprink! I just I am the first one to use porn on the wiki...but hey, it's a really real issue. And Tyson...he was only going to be a comedic character...I guess he served his purpose well. Goldenshane 14:28, August 21, 2010 (UTC)
I should mention about what TAU is saying. There are people who have homoseual feelings, be it attraction/crushes, that doesn't mean they are homosexual. Others may feel that those feelings are wrong, and choose to ignore them. With Zubin, I'm guessing he had the feelings of attraction, became extremely curious, turned to porn, and then got addicted. That's how I'm guessing it took place. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 18:43, August 21, 2010 (UTC)
Sprink pretty much hit the spot. XD Goldenshane 19:15, August 21, 2010 (UTC)
Um...elimination order? XD Anyway, thanks for liking the chapter Koops! And I'm glad you like Andrea even more, now, I guess. XD Goldenshane 21:32, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
Hooray! It's the merge!! I liked this chapter, but I am kinda getting sick of the Ulysses/Andrea plotline being so heavily focused. I want Darci to have some time to shine, as she hasn't had much, and neither has Hunter. I really have nothing to say about Alexander's elimination, as I didn't feel strongly about him either way and knew he was a threat. Still rooting for Hunter or Ulysses though!- The Anonymous User 00:06, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
I loved the new chapter. There was something I liked early on, but forgot it, eventually. >_> I liked Alexander, though. Look forward to more. SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 01:41, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Sprink and TAU, and TAU, sorry about the lessness of Darci and Hunter. The reason, though, for Andrea and Ulysses plotline, was because I really needed this chapter for story reasons. Trust me, I'm not gonna be able to fit everything in one chapter. Maybe two chapters, though. XD Anyway, hope that you'll like the rest of the story! Goldenshane 04:12, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Koops, sorry that I eliminated your two favorites back-to-back. It was just part of the order. Glad you're changing your views on Stephanie, though. And thanks for commenting! Goldenshane 20:18, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
Woohoo!! Andrea's finally gone!! I just hope Ulysses is OK with the whole deal, because I still like him a lot. I think this chapter really brought out the best in Stephanie and Nancy, two characters I was not too keen on before. I'm glad Steph has a reason for her aversion to Monica after she came out to her, instead of just being bigoted for its own sake. At least this means that she can change eventually, and see that Monica isn't the same as Nicole, and they can be friends again.- The Anonymous User 22:28, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! About Ulyss, we'll see now, won't we? As for the Stephanie Nancy thing, I'm glad you liked them in this chapter, and yeah, Steph has a reason! XD Anyway, about her and Monica becoming friends again? We'll just have to wait and see. Goldenshane 23:48, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
Good job with the chapter, Shane. I also felt that you developed Stephanie and Nancy, well. I also randomly laughed at the 'they turned their teenaged heads' line. IDK why. XD SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 00:28, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Sprink! That means a lot to me. That, and every comment I get. XD Goldenshane 01:00, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
Alright Shane, you know you deserve this. Great story! You're really improving.
Thanks Gigi! I'm actually really touched by this! :) Goldenshane 01:23, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
Aw. I never got Gigi's seal of approval. XD I liked the new chapter. I liked the new narrative at some points, and sometimes I didn't. I've never been a fan of metaphor, so it's a major adjustment for me, but if you want to write it that way, that's fine. (I voted 'Good' in the poll). I think yuo'll only improve with this new style with practice. Anyway, indifferent toward Julia leaving, and Ulysses seemed a tad bit emo. It was a vote, no one got hurt. XD *hopes this message doesn't seem too harsh* SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 19:28, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
It's not. And Ulysses just lot someone he loved, I think he'd be a tad mad. XD Anyway...I think I might go back to old way of writing...IDK, though. I want my stories to be written how people like them to be written. But thanks for the compliments, guys! Goldenshane 19:32, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Oh, the drama! Oh, the mood swings! Oh the AWESOME!! This chapter brought out some of the darker sides of a few important characters, and possibly revealing some remorse on the part of the apparent main antagonist, Nancy. I like how every character is multi-dimensional in some way; it makes them accessible to the readers. Julia's elimination seemed a little random, but I'm glad it wasn't Hunter (you had me worried!). Personally, I would have voted out Ulysses for snapping like a twig in this chapter, and for being a challenge threat, but Julia left anyway. Keep this awesomeness up!- The Anonymous User 21:45, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! I attempted my newer writing technique. Since not many people like it...I may not do it for Fiji. But I think that this style of writing helps me get under the contestants. Of course...I don't exactly need to show what they're thinking. XD Anyway, thanks TAU, I had some doubts about this chapter, so I'm really glad to see that you liked it! Goldenshane 22:19, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Well Shane, I guess there's ANOTHER thing we have in common, controversial writing. Don't get me wrong, I like the chapter, but it was just...interesting. --Not witch, warlock! It's a robe! Not a dress!
Loved the chapter...even though I had several previews of it XD I thought Nancy's part was really deep All around me are familliar faces, worn out places, worn out faces... 16:15, October 16, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks guys! Koops, I'm not that surprised about us. We both have covered many things. As for Spenny, thanks man! Chim, yep, you had a lotta previews. And thanks for thinking that Nancy's part was deep! Oh, and Koops, this challenge was the reason why I hesitated writing this chapter, but I felt like it must be done... IDK why, I just felt like It needed too. Goldenshane 16:17, October 16, 2010 (UTC)
Wow! Those mushrooms were killer! I never want anything like that to happen to me ever! I like how each of the contestants' pasts were so heavily emphasized, and yet Bobby Jon won immunity despite having one of the most upsetting hallucinations of all to me (a little close to home). I also find it cool that you manage to give the "sadistic" host a surprising amount of humanity. That is definitely an upside of not using Chris McLean as a host.- The Anonymous User 02:42, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! I was really doubting myself on whether or not I could do this. By this, I meant the challenge. I knew quite a few would be fairly controversial and I know that some characters pasts would be against some people's views, mainly Darci's. Her's I was most scared of. But anyway, thanks for commenting TAU, and I pray that things will get better for you! Goldenshane 03:59, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
Uhh..., *decides to finally follow along*.
Woody; The Suite Life on Deck: ...AWKWARD...
xD. I'll read the lastest chappy tommorow, if. I. remember. (remind me, yo xD). (btw, did you get my message on your talkpage yesterday) --mtdm doz knot no hoe 2 spill 04:04, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
I did, I did. And MTDM, thanks for finally following along! XD Goldenshane 04:06, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Sprink! Yeah, I know that the challenge was controversial, though. Don't worry, no other challenges will be like that... *shifty eyes* Maybe. Goldenshane 22:28, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
And yet another awesome chapter! This story may be melodramatic (Darci being upset with Nancy over voting her out...voting someone out doesn't mean betrayal at all!), but I enjoy reading it. This challenge may not have been so unique, but I did like your portrayal of it, and it showed some sides of characters I have not seen before, namely Darci. It's a shame she was voted out. I think I especially liked Stephanie and Zubin in this chapter, for different reasons (Stephanie for her humor factor, and Zubin for his introspection.) It would have been cool if he saw the gay couple, and decided to not fight the feelings anymore. Nothin' wrong with liking girls and guys...sometimes you can't help your attractions, but I understand Zubin is different in that respect. It just would have been cool if he turned out to actually be bi, and just discover it then. Anyway, keep up the good work, and here's hoping Hunter wins!- The Anonymous User 02:32, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! About the Zubin thing, some people (Myself included) don't think that it's okay to be a homosexual. I respect your opinions, though. Besides, why wouldn't I? Anyway, as for the Stephanie thing, I've always tried to make her my comic relief. I think I succeeded now! BTW, bonus points if anyone can make out the references to the movies. About the Darci Nancy thing, the two shared a close bonding thing. Darci simply felt like her and Nancy's friendship didn't matter at all to Nancy. That's why she got so upset. But anyway, thanks for reading, TAU! Goldenshane 02:40, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
Nice chapter. I'm not sure who I liked in it. XD Darci was okay. I don't like all the racist talk and stuff, as I feel like racism is more subtle today, and people know that it's at least wrong to be openly racist, but maybe you know something I don't. I think Hunter will win, now, though. But honestly, I forgot he was black until the recent racism chapters. Let's see... The challenge was okay, but I hate it whne people are mean ot each other. XD Can't we all just get along? SprinklemistCyan is the new green. 22:29, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
Well, about the meanness and stuff, many customers are rude. I've noticed. About the racism, if you go into rural parts, you'll find people still think that way. I'm not saying all, but some. Anyway, thanks for liking the chapter! Goldenshane 22:33, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks, Fanny! I wrote that scene with you in mind. Goldenshane 22:06, November 12, 2010 (UTC)
Yet another chapter of a great story! I like how this one was much less melodramatic than the usual fare for TDTP. Don't get me wrong, I do enjoy the usual melodrama, but this was a nice change of pace. I wouldn't have guessed Zubin would be Jewish, but that adds awesome for me, because I am Jewish as well. The challenge was unique, and frustrating (I would hate to do the tinsel thing...I am terrible at finding things)! As for Bobby Jon's elimination...I find myself conflicted, as I like everyone who was in the final five, including him, but I am glad it wasn't Hunter or Zubin that got the boot. I still want Hunter to win, as this may be the furthest I have made it in a winner guessing contest (not counting TDInfinity, which had an unprededented amount of runner-ups). Keep up the good work!- The Anonymous User 03:11, December 20, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! Trust me... there will be more melodrama to come! Well... not as much as usual. In other words, it's declining. I kinda like no melodrama stuff, it makes it a little more fun to write when people get along, though I love writing conflict. To my Fiji characters, be afraid, be VERY afraid! XD About Zubin being Jewish, Zubin is a Hebrew name, so I went along with it. And you being Jewish only confirms my theory, all Jewish people I know are epic. I have not met one unepic Jew. I'm also pretty glad that you like everyone in the final five, it means I'm doing something right with my characters. XD Thanks again, TAU, I always hold your opinions pretty high in my book. Goldenshane 03:29, December 20, 2010 (UTC)
I liked the chapter, man. I was actually surprised at the elimination. I thought Nancy was going to be eliminated. So... I'm out of the guessing contest. TT_TT Sprinklemisthasn't changed his signature in a long time. 04:06, December 20, 2010 (UTC)
Sorry, bud. Glad you liked the chapter, though! I promise that the next one won't take a month to write. Although... this one only took me a week to write. XD Goldenshane 04:33, December 20, 2010 (UTC)
Yay! Go Zubin! :D Loved the chapter, and challenge. Was the puzzle answer 'Total drama: The Production' (it's twenty-four letters if you count the colon. XD) Greta chapter! ☃Worker Elf Reddy☃ Making presents For all! 22:21, December 25, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks, Red! Actually, the correct answer was, "Hope you like facing the jury." I'll add that in there. Goldenshane 23:56, December 25, 2010 (UTC)
Awesome chapter this week! I liked the challenge idea, and Shane's insecurity made me laugh, as did the "random" selection. It sucks that Stephanie is gone, but better than either of the guys. I really hope Hunter wins now! I've made it this far!- The Anonymous User 04:06, December 26, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks TAU! Personally, I love writing for Shane. I mean, there's just so much I can do with him! I kinda want him to be that crazy host that no one knows what he'll do next. About Hunter or Zubin winning... maybe one of them will win, maybe not. Perhaps, or perhaps not. Maybe Nancy will win. Either way, we won't know until next time! Goldenshane 04:28, December 26, 2010 (UTC)
What a Twist!
Great "finale", Shane! You really know how to pull out all the firsts, eventhough I knew someone would do a final three soon and you were the first to go with it and now you have a 3-3-3 final tie. I can't to find who the winner is and I really hope a tie would happen on Survivor as well. Can't wait for Fiji! :P --Not witch, warlock! It's a robe! Not a dress!
Aww! Thanks! My main concern was that it'd be too predictable. Only time will tell if people thought it was. Goldenshane 01:58, January 11, 2011 (UTC)
Congrats on a good season, man. IDK when the cliffhanger will be resolved, but I'm guessing that everyone is coming back for another season, or something, at least the final three. I look forward to your next story. On another note, I really liked Julia in this chapter. It makes me uncomfortable when jury members are mean or harsh, or whatever. XD Sprinklemisthasn't changed his signature in a long time. 02:14, January 11, 2011 (UTC)
Believe me, I'm not pulling a Return to Total Drama Island on everyone. XD Thanks for your words, Sprink! I promise you, though, this season's not over just yet! Goldenshane 02:33, January 11, 2011 (UTC)
A grand ending that was! Even if the winner was extremely obvious; nevertheless, great finale and good luck on Fiji. Speaking of which, it says Total Drama Australia at the end, why is that? --Not witch, warlock! It's a robe! Not a dress!
Yes! I finally won a WGC! Hunter made a fantastic winner, though Zubin or Nancy would have been equally deserving. I really liked this finale, and it fit with the originality and over-the-top danger of the challenges TDTP tended to have. I'm going to miss this melodramatic cast, but I'm sure Fiji will be just as awesome.- The Anonymous User 19:47, February 5, 2011 (UTC)
Thanks guys! I'm glad y'all liked it! Koops, we'll just have to find out! Goldenshane 21:37, February 5, 2011 (UTC)
I just got done reading the last chapter. I enjoyed it quite a bit so some of the stuff that was talked about left me O_O. I'm glad Hunter won, he was pretty likable. Clark was kinda funny... Um... There was something I wanted to comment on, but the chapter was so long that I forgot now. >_< Oh, well. Sorry about that. Sprinklemisthasn't changed his signature in a long time. 03:45, February 14, 2011 (UTC)
Couldn't resist the, "Opposites attract" relationship! Thanks for liking (and reading) this chapter! Goldenshane 14:44, February 14, 2011 (UTC)
I've kept you waiting long enough
I know I promised this a long time ago, but better late than never for my thoughts on your story. As I mentioned before, I liked this story well enough that I plan to read your next one, so don’t be discouraged if some of my remarks seem less than flattering.
There were a few grammatical and word choice stumbles, but these were generally not common enough or serious enough to detract much from the story. A couple of situations bear mention, however: in Chapter 4, you said “more or less” (meaning “approximately”) when you clearly meant “much less” (meaning, “this is even less likely than the last thing I mentioned”; the phrase, “let alone” means the same thing); in Chapter 18, you said “invulnerability” when you clearly meant “vulnerability”; and there were a number of occasions where you said, “could care less” when you clearly meant, “couldn’t care less”. (That last is an extremely common error, by the by.)
The only time these word choice stumbles seriously detracted from the narrative was in the Christmas/Hanukkah challenge, because (due to the nature of the challenge) you repeated the errors many times in a relative short stretch. First, the Christmas tree decoration is “tinsel”, not “tensile”. The latter is a real word, but an unrelated concept that is of interest mainly to engineers. (It pertains to how much pulling force an object can withstand before being pulled apart.) In addition, proper usage is "a piece of tinsel", not "a tinsel". Second, it’s “Hanukkah menorah”, not “Hanukkah Memorial”. Note that “menorah” is a generic term, so it isn’t normally capitalized. In fact, you wouldn’t even need to say “Hanukkah”, except for the first time you mentioned the menorahs; in later references, you could simply say, “menorah”.
The main weakness I saw in the story was that too many of the contestants struck me as too much alike in their temperaments and mannerisms, at times giving the feel of four or five sets of clones instead of 20 distinct personalities. The most striking example of this is the tendency for people—even the host and various bit players—to burst into tears at the drop of a hat. Seriously, you could have called this story, Total Drama Waterworks, or Total Drama: The Crying Game, or maybe something like Total Drama Lachrymae (“Flow My Tears”) if you wanted to be fancy about it. In fact, as references to weeping, the word “tears” appears 95 times, which work out to an even 5 times per chapter. The singular “tear” appears 28 times (1.5 times per chapter); “crying” appears 48 times (2.5 time per chapter); “cries” (when not in the context of “cries out”) appears 15 times; and “cry” appears 16 times. All told, the average chapter has 10.6 references to weeping. Granted, a number of these references come in clusters, with three or four pertaining to the same incident, but still…I think you can see why all the weeping struck me as excessive. Even so, it wouldn’t have been so apparent if it had just been one or two or three characters crying all the time.
As for the story’s events, it bears mention that having contestants talk about previous seasons (in this case, TD Craziness and the canon TDI/TDA/TDWT) is strongly discouraged in actual elimination games. The producers of Survivor, for example, explicitly tell each crop of new contestants that any references to prior seasons’ event or contestants will NEVER appear in the finished episodes, with the clear implication being, “don’t talk about these things if you want a lot of screen time.” (Of course, they might make exceptions for things like All-Stars seasons, where everyone has been on the show before.)
Andrea’s backstory didn’t quite ring true. I don’t know how tolerant the Hermit Kingdom is of Christianity—“not very” would be my first guess—but I doubt that summary execution is a common response. A show trial, followed by either execution or incarceration in some hellhole, seems more likely. Was the fate of Andrea’s parents based on a specific incident that you were aware of?
That said, the only time my willing suspension of disbelief was seriously tested was in the Chapter 6 elimination, when Jerry left instead of Alexander. Granted, Jerry was generally no prize, either; but Alexander seemed unstable to the point of being dangerous, and after his display in the dodgeball match, I expected his teammates to want to get rid of him for their own safety, alliance or no. (Speaking of Alexander’s alliance, I liked its “too much too soon” quality, i.e. a grand alliance that quickly begins to fragment from its internal stresses.) Perhaps Alexander himself realized how lucky he was to have been spared that night, and perhaps he wasn’t really as unstable as he seemed, because he was noticeably more innocuous for the rest of his time in the game, starting with the very next chapter.
Stephanie’s re-examining of her beliefs after her argument with Monica didn’t quite ring true. (The TV Tropes site calls this “Easy Evangelism”. It’s a common Mary Sue trait, not that I’d ever mistake Monica for a Mary Sue.) Generally speaking, it takes a lot more than one blazing row to make people re-examine their core beliefs. Although such epiphanies can and do happen in real life, the far more common response to the sort of confrontation Stephanie faced is to dig in.
I naturally liked some characters better than others, but none really emerged as my clear favorite. I probably liked Darci and Heidi as well as any; but Nancy, as the guilt-ridden antagonist, gets points for being the most memorable of the lot. The only characters I disliked were the ones that it seemed we were supposed to dislike, e.g. Freddie and the first incarnation of Alexander.
I would rate TD:TP at 8.5/10. An engaging and entertaining story, well written for the most part but with plenty of room for improvement in Total Drama Fiji. A good experience builder, on the whole. This story has my support on the Featured Story ballot for as long as it needs it. Gideoncrawle I have a song to sing, O! Sing me your song, O! A wandering minstrel, I-- 02:12, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
YAY! I got a good score! Thanks for all the insight. There was a lot of it. Yeah, I realize that this story had a lot of weaknesses. About Andrea's backstory, I know I was quite inaccurate with quite inaccurate. But alas, I've learned. I also felt like there were many clones in my story. I really don't like writing for so many, but Total Drama calls for it. I'm really trying to improve that on Fiji. If it seems like some characters change from the first four chapters from the rest of the story in Fiji, it's because I've figured out how I want to write for them. Again, I'm still learning. This was a good experience thing for me, so I know quite a lot more about writing than I used to. Overall, I'm glad that you liked a lot of them. And I'm really glad that you liked Nancy. Darci and Heidi as well. Don't worry, my characterization hopefully is better in Fiji. As for weeping, it won't be as much. Again, only a young teen. XD Either way, I'm very glad you liked it. --Goldenshane 02:31, June 1, 2011 (UTC)