Winner Guessing Contest
Diamond - The road to success is always under construction 14:58, July 9, 2013 (UTC)
Sergeant McKee -
Wista - It was a plane ride from LAX to O'Hare And what happened next was a series of unfortnate events 06:28, November 18, 2013 (UTC)
Discussion (Feedback Wanted!)
Really liked this episode. :P The end surprised me. xD Oh, CeCe the mastermind. I can see a lot of potential on her, and I think the "dumb girl who's actually evil" idea is original, so looking foward to see her antagonism. :P I love Diana and her constant moodswings. <3 xD WTF was up with Chris at the reward challenge? Was he high? Oh, Daniel's freaking out... is he gonna burn the shelter down? ;\ Mikayla after the challenge. <3 And I loved the trigger word line. :P Oh, Trish is gonna be nicer? Looking foward for this. Anyway, I died at the end. The OTTN1 Mary is something I never expected. xD If you have time to think of a beautiful end, then live beautifully until the end." 06:12, November 18, 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for that helpful feedback, Bruno! You're so OTTP. Jaxswim knows exactly what he wants and who he wants to be. 22:31, December 28, 2013 (UTC)
Just read chapter three. It's great! :D That Wista/Daniel moment in the beggining was cute. I sense a relationship. Or maybe just a friendship. :P James is fun. I wonder if his alliance is gonna work, or his antics will cause his fall. Trish trying to be nicer is hilarious. xD Can't wait to see how much is takes until she rages and goes OTTN mode. lol I love CeCe, as I said, the whole thing about her pretending to be dumb but being ruthless and cunning is pretty interesting. The challenge was really fun. I kinda felt really bad for Melody, but later I think she overreacted. I dunno. I liked her but she wasn't my favorites, so her elimination wasn't that sad to me. :P Valar Morghulis - Valar Dohaeris 02:57, June 29, 2014 (UTC)
TrishXBrian! <3 I ship them. :P Oh, CeCe is really a HBIC... except no one else knows it. lol People know Wista is an alien? I thought it was a secret or something, I might have missed something. xD Aw, poor Daniel. I like what you are doing with him and his pyromania. I kinda died at Jamie's alphabet strategy. xD "Who Killed Lividmanda?" reference. <3333 Good job at the whole bird thing, it worked both for the challenge and for plot stuff too. And the TDRI reference. :P I felt bad for Daniel. At least he found Wista. <3 Surprised James is gone. After his confessional about splitting up Wista and Daniel, I expected Daniel to go. Then I expected Victor to go and expose the alliance's plan. :P Glad James left though, he was kinda douchey. xD Valar Morghulis - Valar Dohaeris 04:07, July 28, 2014 (UTC)
So I read the first chapter! I am thinking you misnamed this season though and that bothers me A LOT! I did not sign up to read a Survivor fic, I really, really can't stand them. They are just irkful, but I will try my best to stick it out.
The cast is really, really interesting! I know more of the characters than I normally would! Well, I know the ~personalities~ I don't really know who is who, just yet! But I will evernutally I bet! But as it stans, my fav--fav -fav is Wista! I am a massive sucker for characters like her.They're positive outlook and their wide open eyes to world is great! I am also a massive fan of how characters liek them manage to get onn everyone's nerves! So fingers crossed! Close runner ups are Agent Rond? And Vic my Vamper <3 These three along with....
Cece! Who I loved before her ~reveal~ and now Im not sure about how I feel about are the most memorable characters, and thus the ones I like the most as of now. But things can change... they always so. But I am looing forward to seeing Cece develope now, and if anyone catches on...
OMG I FORGOT ABOUT DIAMOND. She seems like she could be an early out, or an amazing character! I love her outlook on the game, and her thought process! Also Adodis? Basically ignoring her 247 is great too!
The challenge was meh, it seemed like it was just there and I don't even think any one actually participated in it? Oh well. I look forward to reading more :) ZacAttack Rawr 01:59, July 29, 2014 (UTC)
Merp. What just happened exactly? I am really, really dead. tbh. (That is how you youngsters speak, yes?) Mary just kind of exploded... Which I think was amazing, especially since I don't think any one really knew she existed, like at all... The bad thing is that she may have ruined Diana's chances at winning this thing </3 R.I.P.
The challenge was really good! I think that the entire thing was amazing and helped Total Dramaify your story, but more on that later >_>. I liked that the F team tried to throw the challenge, and the way that it went down was great! I'm really enjoying the team dynamics on that team, in particular. The fact that everyone basically agreed to throw the challenge,, and did so in such a painfully obvious way, and James still didn't realize? Yeah I think he might need a new career.
...Jake? I'm not really sure what is up with this grumpy pants. But I am hoping that he leaves next. Him and Melody I think are the only two who don't really ~fit~ so they don't have much to offer their team.. SO I was actually pretty stoked when he left the first time, and then he came back- :(.
Wista and Daniel. This is now my OTP for your story. Sorry not sorry at all. They both are really strong characters in my eyes! They aren't be forced into an undersog spot. They just kind of are. I worry for them both. Will Wista be able to survive so far away from home.... Wherever home is. And will Daniel be able to not become a crazed pyromaniac? I am worried for my OTP, but I have faith they will be able to manage this tugh competition together!
And now for the Total Drama blurb. There are a number of things that make this story feel ~Survivor~esque. Tree mail, the names of the teams (then again TDPI), the seperate beaches, collecting water etc. The setup of the story is very survivor like. But I think it is, without a doubt a Total Drama Fiction. The humour, the challenges, the host, and the contestants are all very ~TD~ like. And they are in the in what really make a difference, your setting just has more of a Survivor feel than most would... But I think it gives you more room to parody the genre.
Wista and Daniel bonding further! I'm actually really glad that you didn't just set them up together and that they're still working towards something. It gives them some wiggle room for their stories to develope. And you avoided a massive death trap by giving them james to work with. An issue I discovered is that characters need to interact with atleast two other characters in order for their stories to really grow, and avoid them becoming stagnant. Plus James blatantly using them and being plain rude is pretty fun! They're my favourite trio right now!
Trish and Brian are meh. They're like Owen and Duncan to me. Always there, but not really worth anything to me. I can deal with them for now, but if they make it far I'm sure I'll have a crying session. SADLY another character who has falled into the same boat is Cece. I am sick of her. She needs to go and she needs to go soon. She's too BLAH. Because of the fact that her entire ~stich~ is working and it really shouldn't be. The only person that seems to be able to get rid of her at this point is Trish... ~Woo?~
The challenge started great, but it just kind of felt really off with the entire setting of the show, and all of that jazz. If they're on random beaches, the whole let's film an entire video thing just kind of felt off. But idk, the ideas they had were interesting. Jake turning into an operah singer was interesting I guess. I'll be honest I skipped over when the lyrics were there, I didn't feel like it was worth reading. You just spent a long time explaining what the videos were and then having to re~read it? No thanks.
Now I feel sad though. Melody was starting to be nice and fluffy. And the entire chapter just felt like it was designed to eliminate her, even with Brian's massive failure. She was on the outs, and then she got the boot. I feel like if anyone returns she should be the one to get the chance to, she has much more to prove now <.3 ZacAttack Rawr 23:49, July 29, 2014 (UTC)
Phew. Captain jerk-dude is gone. If he laid a finger on either Daniel or Wista I think I would need to metaphorically murder him. I am glad he can get ~help~ now though. his entire personality needs a little bit of an adjustment. I think out of the entire cast, he was the biggest dissapointment. For a secret agent he really didn't do all that much. His character just became that rude guy, and meh, wasn't the greatest.... But back to my <3 <3 Lovers. I think Micki may have been onto something this chapter, but I'm not really sure. I am really interested in learnign more about Wista, and Daniel's strange connection with her!
Jamie is actually super fun I think! I am wondering if he's going to go in REVERSE alphabetical order so that he can keep Cece around longer? Not that I am a fan of that idea, I am still very Anti Cece and Brian and Trish, more so now, that they have taken my fanger under their wings, and basically cementing their spot in the merge >_> I just feel like you're shoving them into the ~main~ role without first making us care about them. They are ~strictly~ gameplay. They have no bonds with any of the cast that make us, the reader want them to stay around. Even Heather had negative bonds, which serve the same purpose. At this point they're just gamebotting and need to leave before they ruin the story.
The challenge was eh.... I don't know how I feel about it. It gave lots of interactions that's for sure! But asides from Wista and Daniel I don't think that it actually led to develope any bonds- and it wasn't exactly ~entertaining~ so it kind of missed the mark, I think. Merr I think that's all there really is to comment on for this chapter... I think you really need to work on giving the characters ~Bonds~ they're what get users talking about stories, and they're what make users connect to the characters- because lets be honest none of us have been on a reality show, so we can't connect with their alliance-making. ZacAttack Rawr 14:19, July 30, 2014 (UTC)